Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

along side with the developement of vehicals , cars accident become a serious problem threatning people's lifes.

over the past 8 years the governement considered this situation and started an action to help dicrease accident fatalities which is : speed cameras

As the first graph shows , speed camera fines by drivers who have been caught driving fast by speed cameras , on the other hand we have another graph that shows the road accident fatalities which seems to be a little disapointing .

The results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras were : for the first question if they think speed cameras reduce the numbre of accidents 32% of the answers was yes , 60 % for no and 8 %for i dont know , the second question was about the main reason for the installation of speed cameras , 26 % of people think to improve road safey while 71 % think to raise revenue and for the last question what do you think about the number of speed cameras on the roads : 56% for too many , 19% for too few and 17% see that he number is about right .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The candidate attempts to cover all parts of the input data, mentioning both graphs and the survey tables. However, the report lacks a clear overview and fails to provide specific numerical data from the charts, such as the initial and final figures for fines and fatalities, or key trends over the eight-year period. Instead, the response relies on vague descriptions like 'speed camera fines by drivers who have been caught driving fast' and describes the fatality trend merely as 'a little disapointing'. Furthermore, the reporting of the survey statistics contains copying from the prompt rather than a synthesized summary. To reach a higher band, the student needs to select key features, group data logically, and present specific figures with a clear overall trend summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response shows a basic attempt to structure the report into paragraphs, separating the introduction, the trends, and the survey results. However, the overall organisation is weak and lacks clear progression. There is a lack of effective cohesive devices; sentences are loosely linked with basic punctuation or run-on structures, such as starting the third sentence with 'As the first graph shows ... on the other hand we have another graph...'. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the main body lumped into excessively long, unmanageable blocks of text, particularly the lengthy sentence detailing all the survey percentages without a break. Referencing is sometimes unclear, which hinders the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily reliant on words lifted directly from the prompt, such as 'speed cameras', 'road accident fatalities', and 'survey'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'developement', 'vehicals', 'threatning', 'lifes', 'governement', 'dicrease', 'disapointing', 'numbre', and 'safey'. The lexical range is narrow and inadequate for an academic task, showing little ability to use less common vocabulary or paraphrase effectively. Word choices are sometimes unnatural or inaccurate, which occasionally strains the reader's interpretation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writer attempts some complex structures, but these are frequently faulty and accompanied by basic grammatical errors. There are issues with sentence boundaries, resulting in run-on sentences and comma splices, such as the opening sentence: 'along side with the developement of vehicals , cars accident become a serious problem threatning people's lifes.' Punctuation and capitalization are generally poor throughout the piece (e.g., lowercase letters at the beginnings of sentences and after full stops). Subject-verb agreement errors ('cars accident become') and preposition misuse ('along side with') are common. Error frequency is high, though meaning can usually be discerned with some effort.

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