Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graphs illustrate howmany riders are drive fast which captur in road side speed cameras and death in road cress in Britain in 8 year. The table give a resul of survay in which three qustions asked to ever one.
All over speed goes up day by day, on the other hand accidenta fatalities face fluctuation. More than half people disagry that speed camara helps in decrease death rate. It implant for rais revenue is the thought of 71% population.
The spped camera finding shows In startin year speed was at 2,00,000 ar lowest atage which regykarky increase till six year and reach at 8,00,000. In next two year speed increase drametically, at the 8th year it is at 1,600,000. In contrace the death rate was little above than 3000 which face fluctuation in between and at the end of the 8 year it remains in same place.
60% people think that speed camara is not helpfull in decreasing road accidents but 32% are agrr on that. Moreover onle 26% people believe that speed cameras implant for improve road safety, rest of them are mostly think it is for raising revenue. More than half community belives that there is too mant camaras on road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt by describing the line graphs regarding speed camera fines and fatalities, as well as summarising the survey tables. However, the interpretation of the data contains inaccuracies and misunderstandings. For example, the student writes that 'reach at 8,00,000' and mentions speed increasing dramatically, but misreads the figures for fines. The overview is weak, lacking a clear summary of the overall trends (that fines increased significantly while fatalities remained relatively stable). Ideas are presented, but the lack of precise data handling and analytical depth keeps this response at a lower band level. While it covers the main visual elements, the execution of the data description lacks precision.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is organised into four paragraphs corresponding roughly to an introduction, an overview, and details for the graphs and tables respectively. However, progression is often hindered by abrupt transitions and poor referencing. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or inaccurate (e.g., 'All over speed goes up', 'In contrace'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is frequently disrupted by severe grammatical and lexical breakdown, making the flow disjointed and difficult to follow in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous severe spelling errors that frequently impede communication (e.g., 'captur', 'cress', 'survay', 'qustions', 'disagry', 'camara', 'implant', 'rais', 'spped', 'drametically', 'contrace', 'agrr', 'onle', 'mant'). The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'speed cameras', 'accident fatalities', and 'revenue', but the widespread spelling mistakes and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'speed' used instead of 'fines') demonstrate a very limited control of lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed (e.g., 'The line graphs illustrate howmany riders are drive fast which captur in road side speed cameras and death in road cress'). Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction are pervasive throughout the text and frequently distort meaning, making it difficult for the reader to parse the exact intended message.
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