Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given line graphs illustarte the outcomes of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras fines and road accident fatalities, over an eight-year period.
Overall, it is evident that the speed camera fines had sharpely rise and reached at peak, whereas road accident fatalities flucluated and similarly level till the ending period.
Looking at the information in more details, At the beginning of the period, speed camera fines was approximately 2 lakh then, it increased by 2 lakh in third year. Likewise, In fifth year, it has slightly growth by 2 lakh and in sixth by 1 lakh and consistenly rose and the people payed 16 lakh fines at the ending of the period.
In contrast, road accident fatalities was accounted for almost 3100. The given figure shows the flucluations throughout the period. In second year, it increased by 300 and in third year it remained the same. Similarly, by fourth year it had been reduced by 400, but again increased gradually and by eight year it was around 3400.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The candidate attempts to address the prompt by describing the line graphs regarding speed camera fines and road fatalities. However, there is a significant task-fulfillment failure: the student completely ignores the survey tables regarding people's opinions on speed cameras, which form a major part of the visual data. Furthermore, the description of the line graphs contains inaccurate data reporting, such as stating 'speed camera fines was approximately 2 lakh' (the term 'lakh' is also inappropriate for British data) and misinterpreting the final figure as 16 lakh instead of 1.6 million. The overview mentions rising fines and fluctuating fatalities, but overall the response falls short of fully covering all parts of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into four paragraphs with a basic introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for each graph. However, logical progression is hindered by poor cohesive devices and unnatural transitional phrases like 'Looking at the information in more details' and 'Likewise, In fifth year'. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing between sentences is occasionally confusing. The overall arrangement shows some coherence, but the mechanical and inaccurate use of cohesive ties keeps the response at a lower band.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 report. The student uses non-standard terms such as 'lakh' instead of millions, and makes frequent spelling and word-choice errors, including 'illustarte', 'sharpely rise', 'flucluated', and 'payed'. There are also awkward collocations like 'reached at peak' and 'slightly growth'. While the general topic is understandable, the frequent lexical inaccuracies and limited vocabulary range constrain the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or past-tense narrative structures frequently result in errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('speed camera fines was') and incorrect verb forms ('has slightly growth', 'had been reduced'). Punctuation and capitalization errors are also present (e.g., 'At the beginning... then, it increased'). Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score.
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