Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrate the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. Due to installation of speed cameras on the road side the number of fined significantly increased from year first to year 8 and the number of road accident were first decreased during first 4 years and than increased next four years. During first year the speed cameras fined [redacted phone] driver over fast driving, next year number increased approximately to [redacted phone], in third year number increased to double of year one, while in year 4 it reached to approximately to 500 thousand driver, in the upcoming year the number has reached the [redacted phone] dirver while from year 6 to 8 the sharp increased were taken place and the number of fined were reached approximately 800 thousand to [redacted phone]. While the number of road accident fatalities were first increased from approximately from 3000 to 3300 during the first years and then followed by decreased in number from year 3 to 4 and the number of fatalities taken place were reached the 2900 approximately by next years the number of fatalititie increased.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to describe the main trends from the charts, noting the rise in speed camera fines and mentioning fluctuations in road accident fatalities. However, the response completely omits the second part of the prompt, which requires describing the tables showing survey results on people's opinions of speed cameras. Furthermore, there are several inaccurate readings of the data, such as stating that the number of fines reached '1600000' in year 8 when the visual shows 1.6 million accurately, but misreporting earlier years and misinterpreting the fatality figures which actually hover between 3,100 and 3,350 rather than decreasing significantly as stated. Due to the complete omission of the survey data and inaccurate data representation, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response suffers severely from a lack of proper paragraphing, written as one continuous, unbroken block of text instead of distinct paragraphs for the introduction, overview, and body details. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as stringing clauses together with commas ('while in year 4 it reached...', 'while from year 6 to 8...'). There is no clear overall progression or logical grouping of information. Referencing is weak and mechanical, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of data. This falls squarely under the criteria for band 4.0 due to the lack of paragraphing and poor cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'number', 'year', 'increased', and 'speed cameras'. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as 'dirver' instead of driver, 'fatalititie' instead of fatalities, and awkward phrasing like 'fined 200000 driver over fast driving'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'fatalities' and 'significantly increased', the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes hinders comprehension and restricts the score to a band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on lengthy, run-on sentences joined by conjunctions or commas without proper terminal punctuation or clause separation (e.g., 'Due to installation of speed cameras on the road side the number of fined significantly increased from year first to year 8 and the number of road accident were first decreased...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('number of road accident were') and incorrect word forms ('the number of fined'). Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, justifying a band 4.0.

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