Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

These graphs demonstrate the speed camera fines and road accident fatalities in Britian after fast driving of vehicals by local drivers.

Overall, the graphs show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight year period since the introduction of speed cameras.

After the introduction of speed camera fines, the road accident fatalities have remained consistant over the period of eight years. In this reagrad, fines were static during the noticed 4 years. however, a sudden raise was noticed during the next 4 years.

Nevertheless, road accidents fatalities was considerabily declined during the quarter of mention time slot. Moving onwards, it had highlighted again peak of fatalities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word length of 150 words, coming in at 129 words, which results in a direct penalty under Task Achievement. Furthermore, the student completely ignores the three extensive survey tables provided in the prompt, focusing solely on a brief and inaccurate description of the line graphs. The description of the trends contains significant factual errors; for instance, the student claims fines were static during the first four years and that fatalities 'remained consistant,' whereas the data clearly show upward trends and fluctuations respectively. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'In this reagrad' and 'Moving onwards,' which impedes the natural flow of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the separation of ideas feels disjointed and fails to guide the reader smoothly through a comparison of the data. Referencing is also weak, making it difficult to follow which data points the student is referring to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with several spelling errors (e.g., 'Britian' instead of Britain, 'vehicals' instead of vehicles, 'consistant' instead of consistent, 'reagrad' instead of regard, 'considerabily' instead of considerably). There are also incorrect word choices, such as 'sudden raise' instead of 'sudden rise' and 'highlighted again peak' instead of 'reached another peak'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for an academic task, restricting the score to the lower bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'road accidents fatalities was considerabily declined' (passive voice and agreement errors) and tense confusion throughout the text (e.g., mixing past events with present descriptions incorrectly). Punctuation is generally basic, and structural errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, preventing the response from reaching a higher band.

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