Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given graphs elucitades information about Speed camera fines and road accident fatalities . A chart compares different categories and present the number in data or percentages .
Overall , it is clear that there are noticeable amon the categories shown in the chart . In addition some categories show some fluctucation increment as well as decrement wheares for some cases they remain stable .
According to the graphs , the first main activities Speed Camera Fines 1 year [redacted phone] , 2 year [redacted phone] , 3 year [redacted phone] 4 year [redacted phone] , 5 year [redacted phone] , year [redacted phone] compare to other . The following by second activities Road Accident fatalities 1 year 3100 , 2 year 3200 , 3 year 3150 , 4 year 3000 , 5 year 3050 , 6 year 3100 . lat have look at the remaning information about first speed cameras reduce the number of accidents in Yes 32% , No 60% , Don't know 8% on the roads . The main reasons for the installation To improve road safety 26% , To raise revenue 71% , Don't know 3% of speed cameras . I think the number of speed cameras Too many 56% , Too few 19% , About right 17% , Don't know 8 % on the roads . All the provided data in suggests that there is no stability in all the activities .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe all parts of the visual data, including the speed camera fines, road accident fatalities, and the three survey tables. However, the data presentation is flawed and heavily reliant on raw, unstructured lists of numbers that are often inaccurate or poorly transcribed from the prompt (e.g., listing 'year 6 7500000'). There is no proper overview of the main trends or significant comparisons across the charts and tables. While the student mentions that some categories fluctuate, the lack of well-selected, synthesised data means the response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements of Task 1. This corresponds to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into an introduction, a brief overall paragraph, and a body section containing the data points and survey results. Paragraphing is attempted, but the transition between ideas is abrupt and mechanical. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused, such as 'lat have look at the remaning information'. There is no clear progression of ideas within the body paragraph, leading to a disjointed reading experience. The overall arrangement shows basic organisational structure, but referencing and logical sequencing are weak, matching Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that stem from attempting to copy or recall terminology from the prompt. Examples of errors include 'elucitades' (elucidates), 'amon' (amount), 'fluctucation', 'increment', and 'wheares'. Less common vocabulary is attempted but consistently inaccurate. While communication of the general topic is not entirely obscured, the frequent lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of fragments and poorly formed simple sentences. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors, such as missing verbs ('the first main activities Speed Camera Fines 1 year...'), incorrect prepositions, and structural breakdowns in almost every sentence. Punctuation is also erratic. Although some simple clauses are understandable, the high frequency of errors distorts meaning in places and prevents the response from achieving a higher band. This aligns with Band 4.0.
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