Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
THE TABLE AND GRAPH SHOWS THE RESULT OF A SURVEY ON PEOPLES OPINION ON SPEED CAMERAS.
SPEED CAMERA FINES HAD SEEN A DRAMATIC INCREASE IN 8 YEARS FROM TWO LAKH POUNDS TO 16 LAKH POUNDS BUT ON THE OTHER HAND IF WE SEE ROAD FATALITIES HAVE SIGNIFICANTLY SEEN ALMOST NO CHANGE. WITH A LITTLE DROP ON FOUTRH YEAR BUT OVERALL GOT INCREASED IN 8 YEARS.
SECONDLY ACCORDING TO PEOPLES OPINION A HUGE NUM OF PEOPLE AGREED WITH THE STATEMENT THAT SPEED CAMERAS ARE ONLY BENEFICIAL TO RAISE REVENUE.AND ON THE SECOND NUM 60 PERCENT OF THE PEOPLE AGREED THATSPEED CAMERAS CAN,T REDUCE ACCIDENTS ON THE ROAD.
THIRD AND LAST A HUGE NUM OF PEOPLE AGREED WITH THE STATEMENT THAT THERE ARE TOO MUCH SPEED CAMERAS ON THE ROAD MORE THAN NEEDED. OVERALL SUMS THAT SPEED CAMERAS ARE USELESS AND TREATED AS A TRICK TO INCREASE REVENUE.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover both the graphs and the tables, mentioning speed camera fines, road fatalities, and the survey results. However, the word count falls just short of the 150-word minimum, standing at 146 words, which triggers a penalty for under-length. Furthermore, the data description is extremely vague and contains inaccurate local terminology such as 'two lakh pounds' and '16 lakh pounds', whereas the chart actually tracks the number of fines/drivers caught, not monetary amounts in lakhs. While an overview is attempted at the end ('Overall sums that speed cameras are useless...'), the lack of precise data handling, failure to reach the minimum word count, and misinterpretation of the graph axis pull this score down to Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which shows an awareness of structural layout for a report. However, logical progression is weak. The transitions are overly simplistic ('SECONDLY', 'THIRD AND LAST'), and cohesion is mechanical and faulty in places. The referencing is unclear, and the overall arrangement lacks the smooth flow expected in academic writing. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is hindered by poor punctuation, missing articles, and run-on phrasing.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms and inappropriate regional units like 'LAKH' instead of standard numerical values or millions. There are frequent word-choice errors, such as 'ROAD FATALITIES HAVE SIGNIFICANTLY SEEN ALMOST NO CHANGE' and 'A HUGE NUM OF PEOPLE'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary result in unnatural phrasing and collocation errors ('treated as a trick to increase revenue'). Spelling and capitalization issues (writing entirely in upper case) further detract from the lexical quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly connected clauses. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure throughout the text. Examples include missing subject-verb agreement ('THE TABLE AND GRAPH SHOWS'), incorrect punctuation (missing periods or commas, comma splices), and ungrammatical constructions ('CAN,T REDUCE', 'THERE ARE TOO MUCH SPEED CAMERAS'). These errors frequently cause strain for the reader and demonstrate poor control over basic sentence mechanics.
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