Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Road accidents are getting common day by day. There was a time when there was not good transportation services and now the the advancement in mechinical tech increased to an extent That commpanies are making high speed vehical for people to reach destination fast.

As advancement is increase along with population the need for vehical and transportation is also increased. the public transpot are also start with multiple vehicals. as the vehicals are increased the competition to reach their destinition also got bigger. and with all this road accidents are being reportrd in numbers. Some accidents are due to drunk driving, some are due to uncouncious driving but most of them are due to over speeding. After the incident most of drivers run away from spot without accountability. so the goverment install camers on road. the main purpose of this installation was to control these incidents.As people knows their is some one who is monetring them. But the incidents still occur.

There is graph that illustrats the speed camera fines and raod accidents over the 8 years. graph 1 shows that in year one the the amout of speeding fines was around 200,000 which increased double over every year, when its comes to 8 year it increased ten aount more . for the second graph , the accidents were also not decreased. It stays same over all 8 years. the reason can be different. At the time when the goverment install camers the population was quite small but over 8 years the advancment in vehical industry and public transportion is increased which eneded up in no improvement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response addresses the task only partially and struggles to accurately report the visual data provided. Instead of focusing primarily on the graphs and tables detailing speed camera fines, road accident fatalities, and public survey results, the writer spends the majority of the introduction and body paragraphs discussing general causes of road accidents, such as drunk driving and unconscious driving, which are not part of the prompt. When attempting to describe the data, the interpretation is inaccurate; for instance, stating that fatalities stayed the same over all eight years misrepresents the fluctuations, and the description of the fine amounts contains significant errors. To move up, the response must select and accurately report key features from all parts of the visual data without introducing irrelevant outside commentary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently, and the overall progression is difficult to follow. The essay lacks clear paragraphing, beginning with an extended general discussion before awkwardly transitioning into the data description with phrases like 'There is graph that illustrats...'. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or used inappropriately, leading to abrupt shifts between sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as using vague pronouns like 'the incident' and 'the reason' without proper contextual anchors. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to group related information logically into distinct paragraphs—separating the overview, the graph trends, and the survey data—and use clear cohesive links to guide the reader through the data smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by numerous word-choice and spelling errors that strain the reader. Examples of inaccurate lexical choices and non-standard forms include 'mechinical tech', 'vehical', 'transpot', 'reportrd', 'uncouncious', and 'monetring'. Spelling mistakes are widespread throughout the text, such as 'amout', 'illustrats', 'raod', and 'advancment'. There is little attempt at less common lexical items, and phrasing remains restricted to simple descriptive language. To improve, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, learn correct spellings of common academic and topic-related terms, and practice accurate word forms and collocations to ensure meaning is conveyed without difficulty.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, and frequent errors across basic and complex structures distort meaning and cause difficulty for the reader. There are widespread issues with verb forms and tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, seen in phrases like 'There was a time when there was not good transportation services', 'now the the advancement in mechinical tech increased', and 'the goverment install camers on road'. Complex sentence attempts are frequently faulty, leading to run-on structures and fragmented syntax. Punctuation is also neglected, with missing capitalization and incorrect comma usage. To progress, the writer needs to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tense consistency when describing data, and eliminating fundamental agreement and article errors.

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