Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graphs give the detailed breakdown of the number of drivers in the Britain who have been caught driving too fast and the nuber of people who lost their life in road accidents over an eight- year period. They also show the survey's result about people's opinion on speed cameras.

Overall, in the Britian, the number of speed camera fines increased dramatically during the last 8 years. The road accident changes intermittently over the given period. Along with that, the surveys about speed cameras were not far effective to reduce the number of accidents on the roads.

In the year 1, the number of speed camera fines was [redacted phone] and it had grown sharply to almost [redacted phone] by the year 8. The road accidents were more than 3000 in the year 1, and its number changes intermittentley throughout the given period and climbed to almost 3500 in the year 8.

The survey after the installation of speed cameras was not effective to reduce

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response only partially addresses the task and falls short of the minimum length requirement of 150 words by two words, which negatively impacts the extent of coverage. While the writer attempts to describe the line graphs concerning speed camera fines and road accident fatalities, the overview is confused, mistakenly claiming that the surveys were effective or ineffective at reducing accidents rather than summarising the visual data trends. Furthermore, the report trails off abruptly mid-sentence in the final paragraph, leaving key survey data completely unaddressed and resulting in an inadequate overview of the mixed visual stimuli provided.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates some basic organisation, opening with an introductory statement and attempting to structure body paragraphs. However, there is no clear overall progression across the text, and information is presented disjointedly. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph consists of a single incomplete sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as using 'Along with that' rather than standard academic transition markers. Referencing can also be unclear, and the lack of a cohesive conclusion or fully developed body paragraphs means information is not arranged in a logically unified or effective sequence throughout the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, seen in phrases like 'increased dramatically' and 'climbed to almost'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'the Britain' (extraneous article), 'nuber' (spelling error), 'lost their life' (inaccurate collocation/pluralisation form), and the misuse of 'survey's result' to describe data that actually represents public opinion percentages. These errors and the restricted range mean the vocabulary remains at a lower band level, occasionally causing minor hesitation for the reader without completely obscuring the core meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with occasional attempts at compound or complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including article omissions and misuse ('in the Britain', 'the road accident changes'), subject-verb agreement issues ('the road accident changes intermittently'), and prepositional errors. Punctuation and spacing are also occasionally faulty, such as 'eight- year'. Because complex structures are frequently faulty and errors recur across simple patterns, the control over grammar remains constrained and requires the reader to decode the intended meaning in several places.

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