Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given line graphs illustrate the number of drivers in Britain who have been driving too fast by speed and the number of people killed in road accidents captured in the speed cameras during a period of eight years.While the tables give the data of survey results regarding the people;s opinions on speed cameras.
Overall, the number of drivers caught on camera due to high speed increased throughout the period while the number of people killed in road accidents also increased except the fourth and sixth year, where it slightly decreased.
The number of drivers who were imposed with fine due to over speed was two lakhs in the first year which reached to 3 lakhs in second year.There was an addition of one lakh in each year till fifth year.The figure then increased considerably to 8 lakhs in sixth year, 12 lakhs in seventh year before reaching a peak of 16 lakhs in eighth year.
The number of people killed in road accidents were relatively less compared with the number of drivers caught because of over speed. In the first year, 3.1 thousand people were killed in road accidents which then increased to 3.4 thousand in the second year and remained same in the third year.The figure decline to again 3.1 thousand in fourth year before increasing to 3.2 thousand in sixth year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The report identifies the broad rise in drivers fined and notes that fatalities fluctuate, but it does not adequately cover the task as a whole. Most importantly, the three survey tables are not described at all, so a substantial part of the visual information is omitted. Some figures are also inaccurate: fines rose from about 580,000 in year five to 780,000 in year six, not 800,000, and fatalities peaked at about 3,350 in year eight, which is not reported. The overview says fatalities increased overall, although the series ends only slightly above its starting point and varies around 3,100–3,350. To improve, summarise the survey’s main findings and report the key trends and endpoints accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is some basic organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and then paragraphs about the two line graphs. This gives the reader a recognisable structure. However, the report stops before completing its account of the fatalities and never moves on to the survey results, so the progression feels incomplete. Several sentences also run together without spaces after full stops, such as “period.While” and “year.There,” which interrupts readability. Linking is limited, with repeated use of “then” and “before,” and the comparison between the two series is not developed beyond saying one is “relatively less.” Use separate, clearly signposted paragraphs for the fines, fatalities and survey, and connect comparisons more precisely.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses a basic range of relevant terms, including “increased,” “remained,” “decreased,” “figure” and “peak,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this report. “Driving too fast by speed” and “captured in the speed cameras” do not clearly express being caught by cameras, while “imposed with fine” and “over speed” are awkward collocations. “Two lakhs” may be understood in some contexts, but “200,000” is clearer and more appropriate for an IELTS report. Aim for precise chart language such as “drivers caught speeding,” “were fined,” and “the number of fatalities,” and check spelling and word forms such as “people’s.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts some complex structures, including the opening contrast with “While” and the overview clause beginning “where it slightly decreased.” However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors affect accuracy. For example, “the number of people killed … were” has subject–verb disagreement; “The figure decline” uses the wrong verb form; and “which then increased” has an unclear reference. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “in second year” and the missing spaces after full stops. These problems do not make the whole report impossible to follow, but they reduce clarity. Practise accurate past-tense reporting, singular agreement with “the number,” and complete, correctly punctuated sentences.
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