Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

i will be writing report for fines and accident fatailitys so acccoding to charts the the number of fines has increase from year 1 to year 8 in addition to having increase of fine amount from [redacted phone] to 1-6 million but in contrast the road accident has shows up down in year 1 to year 3 rising in fine rate shows the lesser road fataliltes and in year 4 chart show lesser road fatatilites as lifted fines and moving formward to year 8 fines amounts were high but road traumas are quite less then year 2 these reduction can be due to camera which were allocated on the roads becuase a person couldnt able to capture high speeding car number plate and moreever the drive will receive a fine so maybe next he will not drive car at speed where he would get fine and just about the right amount of camera should be installed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the broad contrast that fines rose substantially while fatalities fluctuated, and you attempt to describe changes across the eight years. However, the report does not adequately cover the task: it omits all three survey tables, which are a major part of the information, and gives no clear, accurate overview of their findings. Some chart details are also misrepresented. Fatalities did not show a steady reduction: they peaked around years 2–3, then fluctuated and ended at their highest level in year 8. The claim that fatalities were “quite less then year 2” is not supported by the figures. The explanation about cameras and driver behaviour is speculative and does not replace reporting the data. Select the main trends and include key survey percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “in contrast,” “in addition,” and “moving forward,” and the response broadly moves from fines to fatalities. However, it is presented as one long, difficult-to-follow sentence, with no paragraphing or clear separation between chart description, survey results, and explanation. Several links are unclear: “rising in fine rate shows the lesser road fataliltes” does not make the relationship between the figures understandable, and “in year 4 chart show” interrupts the progression. The ending shifts abruptly to a recommendation about camera numbers. Organise the report into a short overview and separate paragraphs for the graphs and survey, using clear comparisons and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some task-related vocabulary, including “fines,” “road accident,” “fatalities,” “allocated,” and “speeding,” so the topic is recognisable. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate, and some expressions are difficult to interpret. Examples include “fine amount” for the number of fines, “road traumas” for fatalities, and “lesser road fatatilites.” There are also repeated spelling errors such as “fatailitys,” “becuase,” and “formward,” which reduce clarity. Some phrases, including “the right amount of camera,” are not natural in this context. Build a reliable set of chart-reporting terms and check spelling; use precise nouns such as “the number of fines” and “road deaths.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an effort to combine ideas with clauses, for example, “in contrast the road accident has shows up down,” and you use some time references such as “from year 1 to year 8.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly formed, making relationships between events hard to follow. In “the number of fines has increase,” the verb form is incorrect; “the road accident has shows” also combines incompatible verb forms. Articles and plurals are frequently missing or inconsistent, as in “the camera” and “high speeding car number plate.” Punctuation is largely absent, so the long sequence of clauses becomes difficult to read. Use shorter sentences with accurate past-tense verbs, and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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