Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graphs illustrates, Number of drivers in great britain who have been caught driving rapidly by speed camera places on roads,And the number of individuals killed in road accidents,over and span of 8 year period since the first use of speed camera's in nation,table also demonstrates result of survey on people's thinking on speed camera.

overall,we can see surge in fines from year 1 to year 8 from bare minimum of 200,000 to reaching staggering 1,6 million, but on the other hand road incident cases and deaths related to it seems stagnant there wasnt any major surge or dip in deaths caused by road incidents,The survey clearly indicated people never had positive view for speed cameras athey doubted the installation was meant to gain revenue and minded there were way to many speed cameras..

If we look at graph the speed camera fines were already around 200,000 and increased little bit in 2nd year but the sudden raise in 6th year to 600,000 and it went to 1,600,000 in 8th year,While fines increased the road accident weere around 3000 from year 1 to 8 little dip in 4th year but overall there wasnt any improvement,

The little to no improvement in road accidents do explain people,s answers in survey as majority 60% believed no decrease in road accidents and other 32% believed in improvement and others did not know.Majority think main reason cameras were installed to raised revenue upto70% shared same thoughts like others said it was to improve safety, majoirty said there are way to many cameras like 59% like others have diff opinions...

In conclusion i believe majority of individuals opposed the idea of cameras as there wasnt any reduction in road accidents rather just fining people for revenue.there sure were 1/3 of people think cameras matter and improve safety...

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both graphs and all three survey questions, and your overview identifies the main contrast: fines rose sharply, while fatalities showed little overall change. The figures of 200,000 and 1.6 million for fines are accurate, as are the broad survey findings that most respondents doubted cameras reduced accidents and thought revenue was the main motive. This meets the task well, with some features more fully reported than others. However, several details are inaccurate: fines in year 6 were about 780,000, not 600,000; the survey figures were 71% for revenue and 56% for “too many,” not about 70% and 59%. Fatalities also fluctuated around 3,100–3,350, rather than simply around 3,000. More precise comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the graphs, and a paragraph on survey results. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Some links between ideas are also clear, such as connecting the lack of change in fatalities with respondents’ views. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. Repeated transitions such as “on the other hand,” “if we look,” and “in conclusion” do not always show a precise relationship, and the final paragraph repeats opinions already covered. Long sentences joined mainly by commas make the progression harder to follow. Use separate, focused paragraphs for the graph trends and survey results, and make each sentence present one comparison or finding.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “surge,” “stagnant,” “installation,” and “revenue,” and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or informal for an academic report. “Driving rapidly” is less precise than “speeding,” “people’s thinking” is awkward for “people’s opinions,” and “way to many” should be “far too many.” “Bare minimum” and “staggering” add an evaluative tone that is not suitable for neutral data reporting. Spelling and word-form errors, including “weere,” “majoirty,” and “places,” also reduce control. Aim for precise, neutral terms such as “rose steadily,” “remained broadly stable,” and “respondents,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast between the two graph trends and a clause linking the survey to the data. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the report difficult to read. For example, “The graphs illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “table also demonstrates result” is missing articles and has an awkward singular/plural pattern. Several sentences run together with commas, as in the overview, and “there wasnt any improvement” needs an apostrophe and clearer sentence punctuation. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses accurately. Check that subjects and verbs agree and that each sentence has a clear main clause.

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