Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates drivers of Britain who have been caught driving cars too fast by speed cameras placed on road and the number of people who have been lost their life in road accidents, in span of eight year after a installation of speed cameras.

Overall, the data of speed camera fine is rising over the eight years, while the data of peoples killed in road accidents show the constant values with little deflection. In addition there are various people's opinions on various aspects of speed cameras.

In first line graph we can see the fine collection by drivers who caught in cameras are [redacted phone] and it was gradually increasing till 5 years from [redacted phone] in first year to [redacted phone] in fifth year. After that their was a dramatic rise from sixth year to eighth year, slightly less than [redacted phone] to around [redacted phone] fine. Where 32% people think that speed cameras reducing the number of accident, while 60% of individuals does not agree with that and other 8% don't have any opinion.

In second line graph we can observe that the number of road accidents in first year is slightly above 3000 that was after introduction of speed cameras. But it was similar in next two year that was around 3200 approximately, after that there was a fall in fourth year. Then from year fourth year to eighth year it was fluctuating and the values lies between 3000 to 3400 deaths. While talking about people opinion 26% people think that the main reason for the installation of speed cameras to improve road safety, while other 71% believe that it was for to raise revenue and remaining 3% does not have any idea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast: fines rise substantially, while fatalities remain broadly stable, and you report several survey percentages accurately. However, the task is only partly covered. The third survey question—whether there are too many cameras—is omitted, and some figures are imprecise: fines in year five are about 580,000 rather than 600,000, and fatalities fluctuate around 3,100–3,350, not simply 3,000–3,400. The overview is relevant but general; it could state more clearly that fatalities do not show a sustained decline despite the sharp rise in fines. Include all three survey findings and select key comparisons more precisely to make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable report structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the graphs and survey results. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is uneven: survey figures are inserted into paragraphs about the graphs, and the final survey finding about the number of cameras is absent, so the coverage feels incomplete. Linking phrases such as “In addition,” “After that” and “While talking about” help connect points, but some are mechanical or do not clearly signal a change of topic. Organise the report by grouping the two graph trends first, then summarising all three survey questions, with clearer references to each data set.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “dramatic rise,” “fluctuating” and “installation,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “fine collection by drivers who caught in cameras” is unclear, while “people who have been lost their life” is an awkward way to describe fatalities. “Deflection” is not suitable for describing variation in a data series, and “the data of peoples killed” is imprecise. Aim for standard chart-reporting expressions such as “the number of drivers fined,” “road fatalities” and “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses joined with “while” and “after that,” but complex constructions are often faulty and errors occur frequently. Examples include “drivers of Britain who have been caught,” “people who have been lost their life,” and “the values lies,” which show problems with clause structure, verb forms and subject–verb agreement. Articles, plurals and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “after a installation” and “in span of eight year.” These errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise building accurate sentences around one main comparison at a time, then check agreement, articles and verb forms before adding subordinate clauses.

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