Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.0)

An increasng trend in the speed camera fines graph over the years hints towards an overall increase of cameras. The trend from year 6-8 has a very high rate of fines however the increasing fines cannot be used to judge the amount of accidents on roads as seen on the trend in the graph of eoad accident fatalities. The trend does not fluctuate much throughout the eight year long period therefore a conclusion that can be made from the information is that these two things dont corelate with each other. Public surveys further proves the point with majority of locals agreeing on the point that speed cameras have no effect on number of accidents taking place. Then comes the question, why are speed cameras installed if there is no effect seen on the rate of accidents? Well the some may say that it is to improve road safety but the but the trend in graphs does not seem in line with this, and that is the opinion of majority again comes in handy as many believe that it is yet another source to raise revenue of the government. And when the talk is for the number of cameras on roads majority tends to be on the opinion of cameras being too many, the reasons may include alot of young population tired of getting tickets every other day due to their rash driving but who am I to judge when there is already an old saying, majority wins authority. In the end I would just advice all the people reading this report to avoid unneccesary rash driving and enjoy the driving to its fullest and stay safe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad contrast between fines rising and fatalities remaining relatively stable, and you include the survey’s main opinions. However, the report only partially describes the visual data: it gives no specific figures and does not clearly trace the changes, such as fines rising from about 200,000 in Year 1 to 1.6 million in Year 8, while fatalities fluctuate around 3,100–3,350. Some claims go beyond the evidence: the survey shows that 60% think cameras do not reduce accidents, not that they have “no effect” as a proven fact. The speculation about young drivers and the personal advice at the end are unsuitable for an objective report. Focus on an accurate overview and selected comparisons from the charts and tables.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a discernible sequence: it discusses the two graphs, moves to survey opinions, and ends with a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “Then comes the question” and “In the end” help signal transitions. However, the ideas are crowded into one paragraph, and the progression is weakened by rhetorical questions, conversational asides, and unsupported speculation. For example, the shift from survey results to “young population tired of getting tickets” introduces a new idea without evidence. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “the opinion of majority again comes in handy.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview, graph details, and survey findings, and connect them with precise, neutral references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “speed camera fines,” “road accident fatalities,” “fluctuate,” and “raise revenue,” so the subject is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or too informal for an academic report. “An increasing trend … hints towards an overall increase of cameras” confuses fines with the number of cameras, while “majority wins authority” and “who am I to judge” sound conversational rather than analytical. Spelling errors such as “increasng,” “eoad,” “dont,” and “unneccesary” are noticeable, and “alot” should be written as two words. Prefer precise chart language, such as “rose sharply” and “remained broadly stable,” and maintain a formal register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use complex sentences, for example, “The trend does not fluctuate much throughout the eight year long period therefore a conclusion that can be made…” However, sentence control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. In “Public surveys further proves,” the subject and verb do not agree; “the some may say” and “the but the trend” show faulty construction or repetition. Several long sentences join independent ideas without clear punctuation, especially the sentence beginning “Well the some may say…”. The final sentence also shifts into direct advice rather than report style. Build accuracy with shorter, complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement, and use punctuation to separate clauses.

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