Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graphs represents the insights of speed camera fines and road accident fatalities calculated through a survey, recorded 8 years after the speed cameras were introduced

We can clearly see rapid increment of fines via speed cameras from the 1st year to the 8th year, fines starting from 200,000 to 1600,000/ year. While on the other hand the number of recorded road accidents have not changed much, fluctuating between 3000 to 3500 annually, whil there had been a slight increase in accidents in the 2nd, 3rd and last year records. According to the survey majority of the people think that speed cameras haven't helped in the reduction of road accidents, they believe cameras are installed to gain revenue and there are too many of them which aren't needed. Very few survey givers had no idea about nything related to speed cameras.While the others' opnions showed that camera fines are usefull.

In conclusion the countryman thinks installing speed cameras are usless as there is no change in road accidents

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast: fines rise substantially, while fatalities fluctuate without a comparable upward trend. You also report the survey’s broad message that most respondents doubted cameras reduce accidents, thought revenue was the main motive, and considered there to be too many cameras. However, the account is only partly developed and includes some inaccurate or unclear details. Fatalities are described as “road accidents,” and the claim that “camera fines are useful” is not supported by the survey figures. The report also gives no specific survey percentages, which would make its comparisons more precise. Add a concise overview and select key figures—for example, fines rose from about 200,000 to 1.6 million, while fatalities stayed around 3,100–3,350.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic overall sequence: an opening, a comparison of the two line graphs, a summary of survey opinions, and a concluding sentence. Linking phrases such as “While on the other hand” and “According to the survey” help signal shifts between topics. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first sentence incorrectly presents the graphs as survey findings, and the long middle section combines several survey results without separating or ranking them. The conclusion repeats the claim that fatalities did not change rather than synthesising the main findings. Use distinct paragraphs for the graph overview and survey results, and connect each point with clear references and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fluctuating,” “reduction,” “revenue,” and “annually,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing data. “Rapid increment of fines” is not a natural way to describe the rising number of fines, while “recorded road accidents” confuses accidents with fatalities. “The countryman” is also an unsuitable general reference to survey respondents. Spelling errors such as “usless,” “usefull,” and “opnions” further reduce accuracy. Choose precise chart language, such as “the number of fines rose sharply” and “fatalities remained broadly stable,” and proofread spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including “While on the other hand the number of recorded road accidents have not changed much,” but control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement errors occur in “graphs represents” and “the number … have not changed”; the latter subject requires a singular verb. The opening sentence is also difficult to parse because it joins the graphs, survey, and eight-year period in an unclear structure. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention: “speed cameras.While” lacks a space, and the final conclusion has an awkward clause structure. Build accuracy with clear subject–verb patterns and shorter sentences, then add complex clauses only when their relationships are clear.

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