Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Road accidents are getting common. Perviously when there was no tecnology there was very less road accidents but with the period of time things changed. people want to reach their destiny and for that they over speed . Due to this road accidents occur and no one want to be accoutable for their wrong doings.Government put camers so that they can charge people for accidents and make them accountable if something worse happens.

The line graph illustrates the 8 year time period of speed camera fines and road accidents fatalities. There is hue increase in speed camera fine since the first year which was 200,000 and it increased till eighth year wich is thousand times more. The fines in speeding increased every year. Though there is not much increase uptil sixth year of cameras but in seventh and eighth year we can see huge thresh which is 1200,000 and 1600.00

For road accidents there is almost no change from first year till eight year. Graph doesn't show enough increase or decrease. the amount of accidents were from 3000 (1st year)to 3500 (from 8 year). Graph show a certian decrease at 4th year but again its not much . in 4th year the accidents register were 3000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the main contrast in the line graph: fines rise substantially, while fatalities remain broadly stable. It also gives some figures, including 200,000 in the first year and approximately 1.6 million in the eighth. However, the report does not cover the survey tables at all, so a major part of the task is missing. Some figures are also inaccurate or unclear: fines are described as “thousand times more,” and the fourth-year fatality figure is given as 3,000 rather than about 3,100. The opening discussion about speeding and government motives is speculative and not based on the visuals. Focus on summarising all three survey findings and give a concise, accurate overview of the chart trends before selecting key details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the response first introduces the topic, then discusses fines, and finally turns to fatalities. This gives the reader a rough sense of the order of information. However, the opening paragraph is a general discussion rather than a report of the data, and the survey information is absent, so the overall progression is incomplete. Connections between ideas are limited, with repeated use of “and” and abrupt transitions such as “For road accidents.” Paragraphing separates the two graph series, but there is no clear overview paragraph to guide the reader. A more effective structure would be an overview followed by grouped details for the line graph and the three survey questions, using clear links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “line graph,” “speed camera fines,” “increase,” and “decrease,” which helps communicate the general trends. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or imprecise, as in “hue increase,” “huge thresh,” “destiny,” and “accoutable.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for a formal data report, particularly “people want to reach their destiny” and “make them accountable if something worse happens.” Repetition of “increase” and “not much” limits precision, while “thousand times more” does not accurately describe the change. Build a more reliable range of reporting language, such as “rose steadily,” “remained relatively stable,” and “reached approximately,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, for example, “Though there is not much increase uptil sixth year of cameras but in seventh and eighth year we can see…” However, this construction is faulty because “though” and “but” are used together, and several sentences lack necessary articles or have unclear structures. Examples include “The line graph illustrates the 8 year time period” and “the amount of accidents were from 3000…to 3500.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at sentence beginnings and around the final graph description. Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors recur across the response. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then add controlled complex clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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