Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graphs illustrates the number of speed camera fines while driving fast and the number of fatalities caused by road accidents over a period of eight years since the installation of speed cameras.

The speed camera fines while high speeding were 200,000 in first year and rose to 1,600,000 reaching 8th year. The number of fatalities ranged from 3000 to 3500.

The cases of over speeding were recorded as 200,000 in first year with gradual increase to approximately 700,000 till 6th year and abruptly jumps to 1,600,000 reaching 8th year. While there is a fluctuation in the number of people killed over these years in road accidents ranged from 3000 to 3500.

According to a survey 60% people have a opinion that installation of speed cameras can not influence road accidents with 32% have other thoughts and 8% said they dont know.

71% people believe that the main reasons of speed cameras is to generate revenue, 26% have think differently that it may could improve road safety.

56 out 100 people think that there are too many cameras on the roads, 19% with opinion only a few and merely 17% saying that these are almost right.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover both graphs and the survey, and you identify the broad rise in fines and the comparatively narrow range of fatalities. However, the report is only partially developed: it gives few precise comparisons and does not clearly summarise the main contrast between fines rising sharply and fatalities remaining broadly stable. Some figures are inaccurate or imprecise: fines were about 780,000 in year six, not approximately 700,000, and fatalities ranged from roughly 3,100 to 3,350 rather than 3,000 to 3,500. The survey is mostly represented accurately, but the final response omits the 8% who did not know how many cameras there should be. Add a concise overview and select key figures more carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the charts, describes the graphs, and then reports the survey results in separate paragraphs. This basic organisation helps the reader follow the different sources of information. However, progression is limited because the first two graph paragraphs repeat the same points about fines increasing and fatalities fluctuating, without developing a clear comparison. Linking is also sometimes awkward: the sentence beginning “While there is a fluctuation” is not grammatically connected to a main clause, and “According to a survey” shifts topics abruptly. Group related information more efficiently, use a clear overview before details, and connect comparisons with precise transitions such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatalities,” “fluctuation,” “installation,” and “generate revenue,” so the subject is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary expressions for the survey responses. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “speed camera fines while high speeding,” “cases of over speeding,” and “these are almost right.” Repetition of “number” and “people” also makes the report less precise. Choose standard chart-report collocations and use terms consistently—for example, refer to “speeding offences” or “fines issued,” and describe the camera numbers as “about right.” These improvements would make the information easier to interpret.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “The line graphs illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “The cases … were recorded … and abruptly jumps” shifts incorrectly between past forms. The clause “While there is a fluctuation … ranged” is incomplete, and phrases such as “60% people have a opinion” show problems with articles and sentence structure. Use past-tense verbs consistently when describing the eight-year data, check singular and plural agreement, and make sure every subordinate clause is attached to a complete main clause. Shorter, carefully checked sentences would improve clarity.

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