Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graphs chart illustrate the value of handlers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of public killed in roads accidents, over an eight-year time since the interview of speed cameras. The tables given the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Overview, While the number of speed camera fines highest value of past eight years. In contrast the road accident fatalities have been smaller change.

In this detail, The number of speed cameras fines 1 to 5 years have not been longer change. Further, It has only [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] constant changes in this. In contrast, The number of people place on road fines past 7 to 8 years period speed camera fines is [redacted phone] to [redacted phone].

look at the figure in details, The number of road accident fatalities passed 8 years killed the people 1 to 4 years is 3000 to above and less. As well as, it has no longer change. Further, the number of people killed in road accident passed 6 to 8 year constantly 30 to 3500 road accident .

In conclusion, The number of value highest increase the speed camera fines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two main chart topics and include a brief overview that fines rose while fatalities changed less. However, the report only partially covers the task: all three survey tables are omitted, despite being a major part of the visual. Several chart details are also inaccurate or unclear. For example, fines rose from about 200,000 to 1.6 million, not to 450,000 by year five, and fatalities fluctuated around 3,100–3,350 rather than showing a clear downward trend. The overview does not summarise the survey’s key findings, such as most respondents believing cameras raise revenue and that there are too many cameras. To improve, select the main trends across every visual and support them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the report into an overview, detail paragraphs and a conclusion, and you use linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “Further.” This gives the response some visible structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently group related information, and the survey results are not integrated. Several transitions are mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas, while repeated openings such as “The number of…” make the report feel list-like. The conclusion repeats the point about fines increasing rather than bringing the key information together. Use a clear sequence: overview, fines, fatalities, then survey findings, with comparisons placed together and references made explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “speed camera fines,” “road accident fatalities,” “survey” and “opinions,” so the subject is recognisable. There are also attempts to describe change, such as “increase” and “constant changes.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear: “handlers” does not mean drivers, “public killed” is unnatural, and “interview of speed cameras” appears to mean their introduction. Phrases such as “passed 8 years killed the people” and “highest value of past eight years” make the intended meaning hard to recover. Build a reliable set of chart verbs and collocations, such as “the number of drivers fined rose,” “fatalities fluctuated,” and “respondents believed,” and check that each noun refers to the correct group or measure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can sometimes identify the intended comparison. However, sentence structure and grammatical control are inconsistent, which often obscures meaning. For example, “The graphs chart illustrate” has an incorrect verb construction, while “The tables given the results” lacks a correctly formed verb. Articles, plurals and agreement are also unreliable, as in “a eight-year time” and “the number of speed cameras fines.” Punctuation and capitalisation after commas are inconsistent, and some clauses are incomplete or joined awkwardly. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add accurate clauses with “while” or “whereas.” Proofread verb forms, articles and singular/plural agreement before submitting.

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