Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph illustrate the number of drivers in britain whi has been arrest drive a car in high speed by camera move in the road value of individual dead in way accident over an eight period of year and intro the speed of camera The chart show result of survey on population opinion on speed camera. Overall the speed camera fine in gradually increase 2 lac to 16 lac on the other hand the road accident is fluctuated increase .

To the beginning start with speed camera fine is increase in 2 lac to 6 lac and than grow the gradually increase 2 lac to 16 lac grow the upward side.

Subsestantioly move the other graph about that road accident fatalites its a fluctuated increase before he increase 3000 to 3500 thousand but in temperary decrease after that again increase road accident 3000 thousand to 3800 thousand

In conclusion the speed of camera is gradually increase and the other is road accident is fluctuated increase

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the broad upward trend in camera fines and recognises that fatalities fluctuate, so it includes a basic overview. However, it does not adequately report the information in the task: the survey results are omitted entirely, and the graph descriptions contain substantial inaccuracies. For example, fines rise from about 200,000 to 1.6 million, not simply from “2 lac to 6 lac” before a repeated, unclear increase. Fatalities remain roughly between 3,100 and 3,350; the claim that they reach “3800 thousand” is incorrect. To improve, cover both graphs and all three survey questions, select key comparisons, and report figures and trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the report with an opening description, an overview, a body paragraph and a conclusion. Connectors such as “Overall,” “on the other hand” and “In conclusion” show an awareness of how to link ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the same trends are repeated, and the body does not clearly separate or explain the two graphs. Phrases such as “To the beginning start” and “Subsestantioly move the other graph” make the sequence unclear. Use distinct paragraphs for the fines, fatalities and survey, and make each paragraph develop a new point rather than restating the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some task-related vocabulary, including “gradually increase,” “fluctuated” and “fatalities,” and uses figures to describe the charts. However, word choice, spelling and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which makes several descriptions hard to understand. Examples include “arrest drive a car in high speed,” “camera move in the road,” and “the speed of camera is gradually increase.” Some expressions, such as “2 lac,” are not suitable for a clear formal report; use standard numerical forms such as “200,000.” Build a more precise range for describing trends and survey proportions, and check spelling of key terms such as “fatalities” and “substantially.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts both longer sentences and simple statements, and the overall meaning of the broad trends can sometimes be inferred. However, sentence structures and verb forms are frequently inaccurate, and errors often obscure the intended relationships. For example, “The graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the speed camera fine in gradually increase” lacks a correct verb construction. The opening sentence also strings several ideas together without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, articles, tense and sentence boundaries, for example: “The number of fines increased, while fatalities fluctuated.”

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