Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Accident due to fast speed:

In Britian thenumber of drivers have been caughtthe driving too fast. due to this manyof peoples killed in the road accidient. The drivers can not control on their vehecials and may causesthe accident. In eight-year period they crose the speed of cameras according to my graph the drivers killed the upto 3000 people on road.

The divers crose the speed 2000 to 1,500,000 of camers and killed the upto 3000 peoples. Over speeding may cause the driver own and other peoples death. Driver should control the speed of vehecials to reduce the death ratio.

At that time,the servey report of th Britain media is that people showthere interest. Question is that about the speed cameras.Number of people think that the road accidient not due to speed cameras. They think the speed cameras should raise revenue. Some people think that many speed cameras were pointed on the road for safety.

This is the report about the road accidents due to speed cameras.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises the broad topics—speeding, road deaths and public opinions—but it does not accurately report the visual data, so the main purpose of the task is only minimally addressed. For example, “drivers killed the upto 3000 people” confuses the number of drivers caught speeding with fatalities, and “2000 to 1,500,000” does not describe the fines series correctly. The key trends are missing: fines rise markedly from about 200,000 to 1.6 million, while fatalities fluctuate around 3,100–3,350. The survey is also only vaguely summarised; its specific results, such as 60% saying cameras do not reduce accidents and 71% believing they are installed to raise revenue, are not clearly stated. Focus on an accurate overview and select representative figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from road accidents to speeding and then to survey opinions, with paragraph breaks separating these topics. However, the progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or connected unclearly. The opening links speeding, deaths and driver control without establishing what the charts actually show, and “This is the report” adds no useful conclusion. References such as “At that time” and “Some people” do not clearly identify which survey result is being discussed. Organise the report into a clear introduction, an overview of the two trends, and a paragraph summarising the survey. Use explicit links such as “By contrast” or “Regarding public opinion” to make relationships between points easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “speed cameras,” “road accidents,” “revenue” and “safety,” and the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the account unclear, including “crose the speed of cameras,” “vehecials,” “accidient” and “servey.” Some phrases are not natural for describing data, such as “killed the upto 3000 people” and “death ratio.” Use precise chart-reporting language and check spelling carefully. Useful terms include “the number of drivers caught speeding,” “fatalities fluctuated,” “rose steadily,” and “survey respondents.” These would help distinguish the two data series and describe changes more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response uses mostly simple sentence patterns, with limited control of more complex structures. Errors in sentence formation and verb patterns frequently make relationships unclear, as in “In Britian thenumber of drivers have been caughtthe driving too fast” and “The drivers can not control on their vehecials.” There are also problems with articles, agreement and punctuation, for example “manyof peoples killed” and the run-on construction “At that time,the servey report…”. Although some short statements are understandable, such as “They think the speed cameras should raise revenue,” accuracy is not consistent enough for the reader to follow the report easily. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and use straightforward comparative structures, such as “The number rose from… to…,” with careful punctuation.

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