Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given report by survey in the graph shows that the accident may not reduced by the speed camera fines in the first year when the fine is only [redacted phone] but when the fine is increasing every year the ratio of accidents were low. If there is too many speed cameras on the road than no one can raise the speed and the driver can't take the overtake the other vehicles. By the installment of more speed fine cameras, there will be no higher accident chances. And theroad safety will be improved. There is no much more difference by the installation of speed camera fines. So if we abide all the trafic rules and regulation, we make our lives save and others lives. if the government applied much more strict rules, and make sure that these rules must be abide by public than there will be no more risk of accident. Road accidents increasing day by day by the road due to our carelessness. I am an eye witness of such a horribe accident, which had been occured when i came to Mianwali.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to discuss the topic, but it does not provide the required report of the charts and survey. It mentions the first-year fine figure and suggests that fines rose while accidents remained low; however, the chart shows fatalities fluctuating around 3,100–3,350, not falling steadily, and the fines rise to about 1.6 million by year eight. Most of the response shifts to advice about obeying traffic rules, a personal account of an accident, and claims about camera effects that are not established by the data. The three survey findings—especially that 60% said cameras do not reduce accidents and 71% thought revenue was the main reason—are omitted. Focus on an overview and selected, accurate comparisons from both the graphs and tables.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is some connection between sentences through phrases such as “when the fine is increasing” and “By the installment of more,” but the response does not develop a clear report structure. It moves from a brief comment on the graph to general claims, road-safety advice, government rules, and a personal anecdote, without separating or organising the visual information. As a result, the reader cannot follow a progression through the charts and survey. Use a short introduction, an overview of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for the graph data and survey results. Linking words should show genuine comparisons or contrasts, rather than joining unrelated points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “speed cameras,” “accident,” “road safety,” and “installation,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “speed camera fines” is used where the meaning appears to be the number of drivers fined, and “the ratio of accidents were low” does not clearly describe fatalities. There are also spelling errors such as “trafic,” “horribe,” and “occured,” which reduce precision. Build a more accurate range for describing data, such as “the number of fines rose,” “fatalities fluctuated,” and “survey respondents,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer structures, for example, “when the fine is increasing every year,” and uses conditional forms such as “if we abide all the trafic rules.” However, errors in sentence construction and verb forms are frequent enough to make several statements difficult to interpret. Examples include “the accident may not reduced,” “the ratio of accidents were low,” and “there is too many speed cameras”; these need forms such as “accidents may not have been reduced,” “the number of fatalities was low,” and “there are too many cameras.” Articles, agreement, and punctuation also need attention. Practise writing shorter, accurate sentences about trends before combining them into more complex comparisons.

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