Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph show the ratio of road accident and the number of drivers in Britian that have driving too fast and camera check the speed of the vehicles. During the driving the number of people killed in road accident during over eight year. when the camera putted on the road average of accident reduce and fine of speed increased every year.

The line graph shows that speed camera fines increased every year during eight years. In the first year speed camera fines started [redacted phone] after one year speed camera fines reached about doub. Ratio of fines increased every year after 6 year speed camera fines highly increased at the last the ratio of fines reached [redacted phone]. Road accident also increased but in limited in the 1 to 3 year the ratio increased in the first year road accident fatalities was about 3100 after the 3 year reached about 3400 and than road accident fatalities decreased at the last in 8 year road accident reached 3400. yes, I think speed camera reduce the number of ratio because the main reason for the installation of speed cameras. I think putted the number of speed camera on the road about 85%.

In the conclusion, the graph gives the information speed camera fines and the ratio of road accident fatalities speed camera fines increased every year and the ratio of road accident reduce.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the broad subject and notes the main rise in fines, including the increase from 200,000 to 1,600,000. However, the account of fatalities is substantially inaccurate: they fluctuate around 3,100–3,350 rather than showing a sustained reduction, and the text gives conflicting figures for the third and final years. The overview claim that accidents “reduce” is therefore not supported. The survey results are also not reported accurately: “I think … reduce” contradicts the finding that 60% said no, and “about 85%” does not match any response to the question about camera numbers. A stronger report would summarise the stable fatality trend and accurately compare the survey’s main responses, without adding a personal opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, then discusses the graphs, and ends with a conclusion. It also uses basic sequencing phrases such as “In the first year,” “after 6 year,” and “In the conclusion.” However, progression is difficult to follow because the opening repeats information and the second paragraph shifts from fines to fatalities and then to survey opinions without clear separation. The conclusion repeats the claim that fatalities reduced, rather than consolidating the key comparisons. Use distinct paragraphs for the two graph trends and the survey, and connect each point with clear references such as “By contrast” or “Regarding public opinion.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “speed camera fines,” “road accident fatalities,” “increased,” and “reached,” so the general topic is recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “the ratio of road accident,” “camera check the speed,” and “the ratio of fines.” “Ratio” does not describe these counts; use “number” or “figure.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “Britian” and “putted,” which reduce accuracy. Build a small range of precise chart language—“rose steadily,” “fluctuated,” “remained broadly stable,” and “accounted for”—and use it consistently rather than repeating “ratio” and “increased.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and some basic meaning can be understood. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, as in “During the driving the number of people killed … during over eight year,” which lacks a clear main clause. Subject–verb agreement is also inconsistent (“The line graph show”), and tense and article use are unreliable (“after one year … reached,” “in 8 year”). Several sentences join multiple ideas without effective punctuation, making relationships unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses: for example, “Fines rose each year, while fatalities fluctuated within a narrow range.” Check agreement, articles, and plural forms when editing.

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