Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Graph Illustrates the figure of drivers and the people who were killed in road accidents in Britain, by the people who were caught driving too fast seen in camera placed on roads, during the eight years. The table presents the results of a report on people prespective on speed cameras.

Over all, It was noticed that the speed of the camers was arose from lowest to higest, Whereas the road accident fatalities fluctuate year to year.

Looking in details, Initially the speed of the camera was 200,000 in first year, Slightly went upward in 2 years, At 5 year it was seen 600, 000 and slowly and gradually the speed of the camers arises year by year and finally ended up by touching 1600,000 in 8 year.

Moving on the other hand, In the first year the road accident were measured at 3000, It was seen slightly going up at 3200, And drastically fall down in 4 year

Till the 8 year the figure of road accident remain same 3000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the two main chart topics and gives a basic overview: fines rise, while fatalities fluctuate. However, it does not report any of the survey results, so a substantial part of the task is omitted. Several figures and trends are also inaccurate: fatalities begin at about 3,150, not 3,000, and finish at roughly 3,350 rather than remaining at 3,000; the fines figure in year five is about 580,000, not 600,000. The description of the fines trend is broadly right, but the overview that the “speed of the cameras” rose misidentifies what the data measure. To improve, cover all three survey questions and select accurate key comparisons from both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and separate paragraphs for the two chart series. Phrases such as “Over all” and “Looking in details” signal the intended stages of the report. However, progression is limited, and the final paragraph ends without addressing the survey tables or providing a concluding comparison. Linking expressions are sometimes awkward or unclear, as in “Moving on the other hand,” and the sequence “Slightly went upward in 2 years, At 5 year…” does not connect the data smoothly. Use clear paragraphing for the charts and survey, and connect each point with precise transitions such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “road accident fatalities,” “fluctuate,” and “initially,” and attempts to describe change with “went upward” and “ended up.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes obscuring the data: “the speed of the cameras” should refer to the number of fines, while “the speed of the camera was 200,000” confuses the measure. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “camers,” “higest,” and “prespective,” and repetitive use of “figure” and “year.” Build a more precise vocabulary for charts, such as “the number of fines,” “rose steadily,” and “fatalities,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences and uses basic sequencing, but sentence structures are mostly simple or are joined in ways that create frequent grammatical problems. For example, “Slightly went upward in 2 years” lacks a clear subject, while “the road accident were measured” has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and number forms are also inconsistent in phrases such as “in first year,” “at 5 year,” and “in 8 year.” Capitalisation after commas and full stops is unreliable, and some sentences run together through comma splices. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, consistent past-tense reporting, and accurate articles and plurals; then use a few controlled complex sentences to compare trends.

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