Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

SPEED CAMERA FINES and ROAD ACCIDENT FATALITIES

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph represents an eight years data, of britain drivers who were recorded by traffic police camera while driving at high speed, and the deaths caused by road crashes, since the police start using traffic cameras. The Table depicts the data of public opinion on Traffic cameras.

The year the traffic cameras were launched, traffic fines goes up to [redacted phone] Pounds, which than keep raising by [redacted phone] Pounds per year, in 6th year the amount goes upto [redacted phone] Pounds, and in next 2 years the amount increased by two times. However, The road crashes showed a constant fluctuation, in first year the accident numbers were slightly above 3000, which went near 3500 in next two years. The has been a drop in accident deaths in 4th year, but by eighth year, the number gone upto 3500.

The survey talks about public opinion on traffic cameras, Apparently, 60% public thinks the traffic cameras had no impact on road crashes. Even more, 71% think the cameras were installed to generate revenue and 56% proportion of public says there are too many cameras on the roads.

Overall, As it seem, The fines keep raising almost by double every 2-4 years, death numbers keep fluctuating, which shows no impact of camera on accidents, and public thinks the same as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and the survey, and your overview identifies the key contrast: fines rose substantially while fatalities fluctuated, with most respondents sceptical about cameras. Several figures are broadly accurate, including the first-year fine total and the survey results of 60%, 71% and 56%. However, some details are imprecise: fines did not rise by £100,000 every year, and the final increase was not simply “by two times”; the chart shows about 1.18 million in year seven and 1.6 million in year eight. Fatalities peaked at roughly 3,350, not 3,500, and the claim that the survey shows “no impact” overstates what respondents said. More precise comparisons and a clearer distinction between chart evidence and opinion would strengthen an already relevant response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on the charts, one on the survey, and a concluding overview. This makes the main information easy to locate. Linking words such as “However,” “Even more,” and “Overall” help signal relationships, although some are awkward or do not express the intended connection clearly. The chart paragraph moves between fines and fatalities, but the sequence of figures is not always easy to follow, and the conclusion repeats points already made rather than synthesising them precisely. Improve progression by grouping each series’ trend and key turning points, then presenting the survey findings together. Clearer references and less mechanical linking would make the organisation more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “public opinion,” “generate revenue,” and “installed,” and the reader can generally understand your comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal for an academic report: “traffic police camera,” “the amount increased by two times,” and “the public thinks the same” are not natural or precise in context. “Pounds” is also unsupported by the chart, which reports numbers of fines rather than their monetary value. Repetition of “traffic cameras” and “number” limits flexibility. Aim for precise terms such as “drivers caught speeding,” “the number of fines,” and “fatalities,” and check collocations and word forms before using less familiar expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example the contrast beginning “However” and the clause “which shows no impact of camera on accidents.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to make the writing less controlled. Examples include “an eight years data,” “traffic fines goes up,” “which than keep raising,” and “The has been a drop.” Capitalisation after commas is also inconsistent, as in “However, The.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, and proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb. More reliable control of basic structures would make your complex attempts clearer.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.