Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In several nations nowday,there is an trending that everyone can work on the arts like music,literature,acting,art etc.In the conclude,the individuals which have no talent will wealthy and prominent and real talent is not worthy.I partially believe that there are several people which are very hardworking but his luck is off,he cannot move forward in life.Other individual doesnt serious about his plan.However,fortunatly his luck suddenly open and leads to his peak stage.

In detail,i partially agree with this idea due to the fact that several people only wait for our luck.However,the other one is believing on our hardwork and patience.they always in this struggle to keep our effort remain consistent.Furthurmore,when your success gate open the your life will completly change and you earn more money and become wealthy and prominent.the genuine talent is not appreciated.for example cristiano ronoldo birth in poor family, he follow steps of success and never give up.finally he achieve our goal which he dream it.he is alone boy but remain steady about his aim.He is prominent and become more rich in all over the world.

On the other hand,when the person should need to improve in our own life.Several individuals are believe in to learn new skills and afterthat focus on money.In my opinion,first learn and after that exclude the L and then earn.This is my priority,ideas are more revelent.

In the conclude many countries today,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a partial position—“I partially agree”—and attempt to discuss effort, luck and success, so the response is connected to the topic. However, it does not clearly address the central claim that people without artistic talent become famous while genuine talent is undervalued. The Cristiano Ronaldo example concerns sporting success, not the arts, and does not show that talent is ignored. Several points, such as “first learn and after that exclude the L and then earn,” are difficult to interpret and are not developed with relevant support. The response also ends with an unfinished sentence and does not meet the 250-word minimum. To strengthen the answer, state clearly whether you agree, explain how fame and artistic ability relate, and support each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” show an effort to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the opening introduces luck and hard work, the main example shifts to football, and the final paragraph introduces learning skills and money without clearly connecting these points to the question. Some transitions do not express a clear contrast or logical relationship, and references such as “the other one” and “our luck” make it hard to identify who or what is meant. The final line, “In the conclude many countries today,” is incomplete. Plan a clear sequence—position, reason, relevant example, conclusion—and use linking words only where the relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary related to achievement and public recognition, including “hardworking,” “patience,” “consistent,” “prominent” and “genuine talent.” These choices show some awareness of the topic, but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. For example, “his luck suddenly open,” “success gate open” and “ideas are more revelent” are not natural expressions in this context. Spelling and word-form errors such as “nowday,” “fortunatly” and “Furthurmore” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing the arts, such as “artistic ability,” “commercial success,” “public recognition” and “undervalued,” and check spelling and collocations. The suggestions below offer practical replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer clauses, including “I partially believe that…” and a sentence beginning “when the person should need to improve…”. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “he achieve our goal” and “Several individuals are believe”; pronouns and possessives are also inconsistent in “his luck” and “our hardwork.” Articles and sentence construction are problematic in phrases such as “the your life” and “he is alone boy.” Punctuation and spacing around commas are inconsistent, which makes some sentences harder to read. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms, articles and pronoun references.

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