Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Its people mind set that they can do it anything, but everything have to been done in its own way. We cannot just be professional in every field. The new genration have high attitude that they can do everything at once, but when they face the reality they decline to belive it. Arts-Music, Literature, Acting, Art etc. these can only be acquire by a person how have courage & hardwork to get it. I agree that people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Firstly, Because of Digital platforms like TikTok, Intagram, Facebook, Twitter etc, are mostly used in society. Everyone is posting some thing on digital platforms singing, dancing, paintings other thing. It bacame more easy for everyone to do these thing online rather than in physical. Weather, the persons are using AI or editor to make and upload videos on digital platform, it dose not matter the viewers are enjoying to see it. Due to digital platforms it is easy to earn know, presiviosly people learn and train hard to earn and became famous. But know its no value to have talent.

Secondly, todays genuine talent are disgrace by there work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I agree”—and identify digital platforms as a reason that people without artistic ability can gain attention. However, the response addresses the topic only minimally: the claim that genuine talent is “not valued or appreciated” is not explained with a specific example or evidence, and the second body point, “todays genuine talent are disgrace by there work,” is left undeveloped. The discussion also does not clearly distinguish popularity or income from artistic merit. The response contains 185 words, so it is 65 words below the required minimum; 16 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with explanation and a relevant example, and complete the essay with a conclusion that reinforces your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph is followed by points introduced with “Firstly” and “Secondly.” This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the ideas do not progress coherently, especially because the second point ends after one sentence and the essay has no conclusion. Several sentences in the first body paragraph move between online posting, AI or editing, viewers’ enjoyment, and earning fame without clearly showing how each idea supports the argument. Linking words such as “But” do not resolve these connections. Build each paragraph around one main claim, explain it in a logical sequence, and use clear references and transitions to connect the examples to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “Digital platforms,” “genuine talent,” “professional,” and “famous,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as using AI or editing to produce videos. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, for example “decline to belive it,” “earn know,” and “genuine talent are disgrace by there work.” Spelling errors such as “Intagram,” “genration,” and “presiviosly” are noticeable, while repeated use of “do,” “thing,” and “people” limits precision. Choose accurate collocations and check spelling; for instance, explain whether online creators “gain popularity” or “earn income,” rather than using unclear phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “Due to digital platforms it is easy to earn…” and a sentence beginning “Whether, the persons are using AI…,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the longer attempts are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “everything have to been done” and “genuine talent are,” while “Arts-Music, Literature, Acting, Art etc. these…” is not formed as a complete sentence. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, making some relationships difficult to follow. To improve, practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence construction, and controlled complex clauses. For example, connect the platform example to its result with a clear structure such as “Although editing can improve a video, it does not necessarily demonstrate artistic skill.”

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