Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that in arts industrie 'anyone can be the part of it', today a lot of popular people with no talent and a talented people have no money and famous. I partly agree that no talent person can become rich and famous, but if only one genius person can shows his talent he will replace 10 of those celebrities.

Firstly, people with no skills can be rich by their network or family connections. This always will be happened in big-status families. Also, in this families still could be no connections in creative industry and children will create their own way but still with big amount of money and background. For example, Kendall Jenner was filmed in a very popular family show and it was opened doors to her in model-industries where she has no talant, how her collegues sais.

On the other hand, talented people sometimes have no big background or good-quality networking for became popular in the arts. In my opinion, the art companies should prefer people with skills, either of place in society. For example, Irina Sheik has poor family and has no money when someone from model company found her, so now she is one of the famoust and richiest models in the world.

in conclusion, I partly agree that no talent people could be rich and famous in arts. However, the real talent people need more time to became like them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear partial position, stating that people without talent can become famous while genuine talent may take longer to succeed. The examples of Kendall Jenner and Irina Shayk are relevant to fame and opportunity, but the discussion is limited: the first mainly asserts that Jenner lacks talent, and the second shows someone succeeding despite a poor background rather than explaining whether genuine talent is undervalued. The claim that one genius could “replace 10” celebrities is also not explained. As a result, the response addresses the topic only partly and its main ideas remain under-developed. The response is 13 words below the required minimum, which further limits the space available to develop and support your argument. Explain what you mean by talent and show how fame or wealth can be gained without it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, the discussion of family connections shifts to children creating their own way, then to Jenner, without clearly linking each point to the claim. The conclusion repeats your partial agreement but does not draw together the two examples. Some linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “them” in the final sentence are unclear. To improve, make each paragraph develop one central point in a clear sequence and use explicit references to connect examples to that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “family connections,” “creative industry,” “talented,” and “popular,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or forms make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. Examples include “arts industrie,” “big-status families,” “model-industries,” and “the famoust and richiest models.” Spelling errors such as “talant” and “collegues” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases, including “no talent person” and “good-quality networking,” are not natural in this context. Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing artistic ability, access, recognition, and success, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your meaning clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea in “if only one genius person can shows his talent he will replace 10 of those celebrities.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For instance, “a talented people have no money and famous” has problems with number and sentence structure, while “This always will be happened” uses an incorrect verb form. In “the art companies should prefer people with skills, either of place in society,” the relationship between the ideas is unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a correctly formed supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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