Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In few States today, There is an ego that ' anyone can do it' in the skills - music, article, performance, art, etc. As a outcome, humankind with no capacity become rich and remarkable and genuine talent in not respected or gratifying.

Well in my perspective i strongly agree because everyone has their own mind and have rights to use their mind and create a powerful contents and multimore structures like let me mention one celebrity in our area his name is jawad khan firstly he was trying to copy populer celiebrities for example salman khan, sunjay dutt, etc. after a while when he famous on social media everyone telling to him you are copycat while he was a good actor when he start struggle and join film industry now he have a good fame.

If a person thinks that he have no ideas, friends, a good family who give advise so as a evidence i am telling in this era when someone have smartphone and having internet this is enough for him because in this most of the people getting help from chatgpt, gemini, etc. it is a easy way to use this features and bulid up a person mindset and get motivation from social media peoples who have nothing but when a person start struggle and want to achieve a high goal smartphone is enough for him.

Overall this is a nature person have a lot of talents, arts, popularity but it depends upon mentality if someone have a good sense of humour he can do everything.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I strongly agree”—and include examples related to fame, social media and access to creative tools. However, the response addresses the central claim only minimally: it does not clearly explain whether people without artistic talent become famous at the expense of genuinely talented people, or why genuine talent is undervalued. The Jawad Khan example is difficult to interpret and does not establish that he lacks talent; in fact, you describe him as “a good actor.” The discussion of smartphones and AI shifts towards how people can develop ideas, rather than supporting your position on the task’s claim. To strengthen your response, explain the link between each example and your view, and develop a clear argument about talent, fame and recognition.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Some linking expressions, such as “for example,” “after a while” and “Overall,” signal examples or a closing point. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough to form a clear line of argument. The first body paragraph moves from people’s rights to create content to a celebrity’s career, while the next shifts to advice, smartphones, AI and motivation without showing how these points connect to the question. Several sentences are very long and contain multiple ideas, making relationships between them hard to follow. Use one main point per paragraph, explain it in a clear sequence, and use referencing and transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary connected with the topic, including “genuine talent,” “film industry,” “copycat,” “motivation” and “achieve a high goal.” This gives the reader some access to your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the message difficult to understand. For example, “an ego” does not express the idea of a public attitude, “skills” is not the natural term for the arts in this context, and “a powerful contents” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “populer,” “celiebrities” and “bulid.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and common word combinations; this will help you express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “If a person thinks that he have no ideas…” and the sentence beginning “because everyone has their own mind.” This shows an effort to use more than basic sentence patterns. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “everyone … have rights,” “when he famous,” “he have a good fame,” and “it is a easy way.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long body paragraphs. Practise forming shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas using accurate clauses; check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when editing.

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