Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays in certain regions, there is a proverb that anyone can do it in different well known sectors like music, literature, acting, art etc. For this consequences, individual with no real talent become wealthy and popular, while original talented artists is not get proper limelight and value. I firmly agree with the view.

There are several reasons for agreeing with the view. First and foremost, in social media, when a person somehow gets viral for some unusual reason, everyone made him more popular by sharing his unusual content or activities and social feeds are congested with those content. For instance, in our country, a boy made a content by doing some unusual activities, he is now in Dubai and he is doing commercials nowadays, also he is doing several short films where he is presented as a lead actor. Moreover, for the availability of social platforms, nowadays people created a page or group, where they post quotes and other contents and got limelight by boosting their posts.

Also, sometimes some people belonging from a well known family, as their father, brother or their close relatives are popular, they used those chance and getting famous and earning money. While real talents did not get sufficient opportunities as sometimes they belonged from a poor background or sometimes they face lots of obstacles as there are no known person in cultural industry . Sometime they are making content but due to lack of money, they can not boost their posts and remain unpopular and do not get proper appreciation or recognition from public.

In conclusion, due to availability of social platforms some talented artists sometimes gets limelight and earns money but most of the time talented people faced difficulties and do not get the chance to prove them and at the end of the day they do not get the recognition as they deserve and do not make money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I firmly agree,” and the response stays focused on why people without artistic ability may gain fame while talented artists are overlooked. The examples about viral social-media content, commercial work, and advantages gained through famous relatives are relevant and address the task. However, the discussion is unevenly developed. The viral-video example is specific, but the point about family connections is asserted rather than illustrated, and the conclusion introduces the qualification that talented artists sometimes do gain recognition without explaining how this affects your overall view. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation of its impact and keep the final position consistent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from social-media popularity to family connections and barriers faced by less privileged artists. Linking phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal this progression. At times, however, the connections feel mechanical, and some references are unclear—for example, “those content” and “they used those chance” make it harder to identify exactly what is being referred to. The second body paragraph also combines family influence with financial and social obstacles, so its central focus becomes less clear. Use clearer pronouns and organise each paragraph around one main reason, linked by explanation and an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “viral,” “commercials,” “lead actor,” “cultural industry,” and “recognition.” These choices help communicate the contrast between popularity and genuine artistic ability. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “proper limelight,” “original talented artists,” “social feeds are congested,” and “boosting their posts.” Repetition of “popular,” “famous,” and “talented” also limits flexibility. Aim for more natural academic phrasing and check collocations: for example, artists may “receive recognition,” while social-media feeds may be “filled with” content. More precise vocabulary would make your argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while,” “as,” and “where,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. Examples include “individual … become,” “artists is not get,” “everyone made him,” and “talented artists sometimes gets.” Some longer sentences are difficult to control, particularly the sentence beginning “Also, sometimes some people belonging from a well known family.” Review subject–verb agreement and maintain consistent tense, and divide long sentences when they contain several separate ideas. More accurate control of these patterns would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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