Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some nation have a belief that anyone can excel arts and literature and become successful,while real talent is ignored.I disagree with this perspective.I will discuss why I belive this is not right and give reasons.

Entertainmet industry has been flourishing since long.Music,theaters and literature has been an important part of our society for recreational activities.In some countries,these are regarded as a great talent and means of earning.For example, United states and UK have a huge music and film industry and renowned names in arts.There are several institutes that teach and train people who want to persue this industry.Audtions are arranged and casting is done according to required roles.It requires a lot hardwork and time to reach such level in this age of competition.Sometime,reality shows are arranged to pick the best artisits.Similarly,earning money is not that easy as it seems.We can see thousands of actors and singers daily struggling to make their way into mainstream.Only those who have polised and learnt are choosed by people.I therefore do not agree with the view that everyone can learn and earn in arts.

Similarly,there is an opnion that real talent is not valued everywhere beacuse of such people who have no talent.I don't think this to be true.An experience person knows how to convince public and make his place in society.In this age of social media,only those are successful who have something distinguished to present to society.A person with experience and strategy will not be entarined.And if by luck a person gets fame and money,it will be short lived as in long term he will have no direction and plans.However,a skilled artsman can bring new with hi expertise.

In conclusion,I disagree with the opinion that anyone can do arts and become rich while real talent is not appreciated.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that anyone can succeed in the arts and that genuine talent is undervalued. You address both claims, referring to training, auditions, competition, and the possibility that fame without skill will be short-lived. However, the discussion is only partly developed. For example, the point that experienced people can “convince public” is unclear and does not explain how this demonstrates that talent is valued. The examples of the United States and UK are also broad rather than specific evidence. To strengthen the response, explain the link between each example and your position, and develop the second argument with a concrete case showing how skill or originality leads to lasting recognition.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs addressing the task’s claims, and a conclusion that restates your view. Linking expressions such as “For example,” “Similarly,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several points are placed together without clear explanation. In the first paragraph, the discussion moves from industry history to institutes, auditions, reality shows, and struggling performers. The second paragraph also shifts quickly from social media to luck and long-term success. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim; avoid relying on “Similarly” when the relationship between ideas is not precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “casting,” “mainstream,” “competition,” “distinguished,” and “expertise.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the arts and professional success beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “people,” “talent,” and “successful,” and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts of the argument less clear. For instance, “an experience person” appears to mean an experienced person, while “will not be entarined” does not communicate the intended idea clearly. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. Using terms such as “artistic ability,” “public recognition,” and “sustained success” would help express your ideas more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if by luck a person gets fame and money, it will be short lived.” This gives the response some variety, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur often enough to make reading less smooth. Examples include “Some nation have,” “Music, theaters and literature has,” and “It requires a lot hardwork,” where the grammatical relationships are not controlled. Several long sentences also run together without adequate punctuation. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and article use, and divide longer sentences into clear units. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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