Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It has been observed that; Nowadays people can not looked their skill on their work as well as passion human choose that types of person who are generally rich and they will not give a attention towards the naturally talanted people. I frimly agree with the given statements. My inclination is elaborated in ensuring paragraph and relevant examples.

The foremost argument to justify my stand is that, In many countries today there attitude that anyone can do it diffrent fields like arts-music, literature, drama, painting etc. For instance, Through diffrent nation people have attitude that everyone can do progess and make their livehood more better from musics, arts, acting as well as literature. It was hard for doing but it was not that much tough like other cources or jobs. For example; People can earn money through painting like diffrent kinds of pictures, by doing roles in drama they earn currency. Besides this; it also true that this types of attitue make people more confidents,energetic as well as they will progess high in their life. Youngers can make country more developed through this kind of thinking such as extra creativity on acting and art make country proud in other nations.

Futhermore; the other reason is that people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated because of this talanted people are stand beside of the known talanted people through their money power. if the talanted people work are appreciated or valude by human make nation as well as people life more developed in their country. In additional, the fact that nation well become back through other country by using the floop artist by taking money in hall and making pictures by untalanted people.

In conclusion, It conclude that people should valued and appericated the other works and make sure that they were talanted or qualified on this work. Through; It will make strong relationship between many people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position—“I firmly agree”—and refer to both the popularity of arts careers and the lack of recognition for genuine talent. However, the response only minimally addresses the central claim. Much of the first body paragraph argues that people can earn a living through art and that this can benefit young people and the country; it does not explain how people without talent become famous or why audiences and institutions overlook skilled artists. The second paragraph mentions “money power,” but the point is difficult to follow and is not supported with a clear example. Develop a focused reason for your agreement, explain its consequences, and use a specific, relevant example to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “The foremost argument” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first moves from earning money in the arts to confidence and national development without clearly linking these points to the question. Several connections are also unclear, particularly the sentence beginning “In additional, the fact that nation well become back.” Linking phrases sometimes announce a new point rather than explain how it relates to the previous one. Give each paragraph one main idea, arrange its explanation and example in a clear sequence, and use pronouns and transitions only where their references are unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “genuine talent,” “appreciated,” “creativity,” and “money power.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “talanted,” “appericated,” “floop artist,” and “make their livehood more better”; some expressions do not convey a clear meaning in context. Repeating “people,” “talented,” and “make” also limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully. Prefer precise phrases such as “gain recognition,” “commercial success,” and “skilled performers,” and ensure each phrase accurately expresses the intended point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “who,” but control is very limited and errors frequently make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “people can not looked their skill” has an incorrect verb form, while “there attitude” lacks the required possessive or article structure. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “the talented people are stand beside” and “It conclude that people should valued.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including unnecessary capitals after commas and semicolons. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause at a time; check verb forms, subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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