Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.
Do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Today I like to talk about the people who are not talented are not any arts such as music literature acting art etc. In over country many people can be free all the day there are no talent no mind to improve over future . every one has on attitude FIRST I like to talk the those people that have no work in hi life .
They do not success in the life . But i do not agree in the statement . Because many people in the countries can be success in her talent such as arts acting etc. Second many people has the genuine talent in the life . They can be struggle in her life and archive her mission . Some people can free her daily life work . But many people can be improve the talent of arts can people improve the talent of acting such improve the literature.
I fully support those people they have any talent they can be struggle . Many people in over country can be work to improve them self and improve the country but many can be waste over time they can not any talent to improve the both himself and country . I know that many people can be struggle to better them self such as to improve the arts acting talent .
Most of them have any attitude without any talent and arts . They will be show him self with out any work and on the other side some people improve himself to show himself in the world .They people are really archive over goal .They are a good people and better all the world
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but struggles to maintain a clear, consistent position. While you express disagreement with the idea that talent is undervalued, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific examples or logical development. The essay reads more like a series of disconnected statements rather than a structured argument. To improve, you should focus on clearly stating your position in the introduction and then providing one distinct, well-supported reason per paragraph. The current content is quite vague, making it difficult for the reader to follow your reasoning regarding why you believe genuine talent is still valued in the arts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. While you use transition words like 'First' and 'Second', they are not used effectively to connect coherent thoughts. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to separate distinct ideas, as the content within each paragraph remains repetitive. Referencing is often unclear, such as in the phrase 'They people are really archive over goal', where the subject is ambiguous. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices to link sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your main argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. You rely on a small set of words, repeating terms like 'talent', 'improve', and 'people' throughout the text. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'archive her mission' (likely meaning 'achieve') and 'be free all the day'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to the arts and professional success, and pay closer attention to the correct usage of verbs and nouns in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many people has'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'they can be struggle'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary components to be grammatically complete. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive patterns. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense for your intended meaning.
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