Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.
Do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
nowadays in few nations, some people assume that dwellers who do not have any talent such as music,literature,acting and art, they not become rich and popular and genuine talent is not effective.I agree with this statement and i will be eleborated it further.
To commence with the agreement notion ,particular talent helpful to become a rich and famous person.Firstly,people can more focus . To be more precisely,if a person have art then they can use that particular talent in their work field which is a productive way of getting poputarity and archieve the highest rank in particular work.For instance, Sachin Tandulkar,who is world wide famous as a brillent cricketer due to his talent he become rich as well as famous in oll over the world.That is why talent is important to build successful career.
secondly,people can earn more and more money with their work and telent. Because they get opportunity to do work more in extra time with which they become popular and gain hefty amount.Such as, he/she can work hard and they increase their talent such as in music field,in literature ,acting and art.By countineouing their profession as well as skill they can become famous and rich in some times.All in all,personal skills are really crutial to become millionair and popular amoung the dwellers.
In conclusion,although special talent is necessary to become rich and famous but other professions are also important to illustrate personal skills in public which helps to incease the abilities to earn double amount of money.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity and logical development. While you state your agreement, the supporting arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the second paragraph focuses on Sachin Tendulkar, who is a sportsman, whereas the prompt specifically asks about the arts (music, literature, acting). This indicates a slight misunderstanding of the scope of the topic. Furthermore, the argument that 'anyone can do it' is not fully explored; instead, you focus on how talent leads to success, which is a different angle. To improve, ensure your examples directly relate to the specific domain mentioned in the prompt and provide more nuanced reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', but the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. For example, the jump from discussing talent to 'people can more focus' is unclear. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the general statement and the specific example is weak. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence flows logically from the previous one will help improve your score in this area.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'rich', 'famous', and 'talent'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'eleborated', 'poputarity', 'archieve', 'brillent', 'oll', 'countineouing', 'crutial', 'millionair', 'amoung', and 'incease'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, make the text feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise synonyms and collocations related to the arts and professional success. Focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and expanding your range beyond basic adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'if a person have art'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'i will be eleborated it further'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'By countineouing their profession as well as skill they can become famous'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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