Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.
Do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
* "It is commonly thought that arts, music, literature and acting can be done by everybody. And others thought individuals with no talent become finance stable and famous. Genuine intelligent is not appreciated. In my opinion I disagree with this statement because all the people has rights to choose wisely their choices and we all do not have same talent all people can not art or do acting."
Firstly of all, I saw many individuals become rich without any talent and study. For examples :- 'Albert Einstein' he give up his study on eight grade and think about doing own his business talent and become top scientics of world such as Mukesh Ambani he also started his own business and now he is billionaire of asia. So, the people who has no talent become rich because they know how to make their own business and start their own.
Secondly, The artist , musician and actors they know their love about their own company but all people can art music or act but not better as them who are artist , actors. Not everybody has same talent and ideas. I love to listen music when I fell sad, happy, depressed . I enjoy listening songs I tried to sing but my voice is not that much good so, I don't sing around people.
Moreover, Genuine talent is valued Because everyone respects artist , actors. Because of their hardwork , good work
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the arguments are underdeveloped and often irrelevant. For instance, your examples of Albert Einstein and Mukesh Ambani are not related to the arts, which is the focus of the task. The position is stated but lacks logical support or depth. To improve, ensure your examples directly relate to the prompt and provide a more thorough exploration of why you agree or disagree with the notion that talent is undervalued in the arts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions such as 'Firstly of all' and 'Moreover' are used, but they do not effectively connect the ideas, which are often disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence that directly supports your main thesis. The current structure feels mechanical and lacks a smooth flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'finance stable' instead of 'financially stable' and 'scientics' instead of 'scientists'. You also struggle with collocations, such as 'all people can not art', which is not standard English. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to the arts and business, and focus on using these words in their correct context. Avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('all the people has rights'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as the misuse of the colon in 'For examples :-'. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb forms and pluralization, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic errors like 'fell' instead of 'feel' is essential.
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