Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In different places now aday, there is a mat that 'anyone can do it' in the different field of art, like, music, literature, acting etc, Some Peoples believe that Talent now a day are not appreciated and some Peoples think that without experience are rich. I believe that Talent are should be focus.

on the one hand, non experience peoples are now a day very famous why because they have some reference is somewhere, like for example, in most government or semi-government places, Jobs are now be own by reference. If you have some reference then you can get a job easily.

on the other hand, those who have experience are not getting the job easily, why because they dont have any reference but they can enhance their talent by doing online business or freelancing- they can earn more then those who's are working in a company-

In conclusion, Although there are some advantage of to be get rich without any specific skills. But the advantage are higher. while if you're a talented, then you can achive your goal faster-

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 180 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a position, the arguments regarding 'references' and 'jobs' are not clearly linked to the prompt about the arts. The essay lacks specific examples related to music, literature, or acting, and the discussion is too brief to fully address the prompt. To improve, you must expand your arguments with relevant examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing and some cohesive devices like 'on the one hand' and 'in conclusion'. However, the logical progression is weak. The connection between the prompt (the arts) and your argument (government jobs and references) is unclear, making the overall flow difficult to follow. Referencing is often imprecise, and the transition between ideas is mechanical. To improve, focus on ensuring each paragraph directly supports the main thesis and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'peoples' (which is grammatically incorrect in this context) and 'reference'. There is little attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to the arts. Many phrases are awkward, such as 'there is a mat' and 'non experience peoples'. To improve, you should learn collocations related to the arts and professional success, and avoid repeating the same simple words throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Talent are should be focus', 'the advantage are higher'), incorrect word forms ('non experience peoples'), and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which is necessary for higher band scores. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and plural forms.

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