Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In some countries, people with exceptional talent are not receiving deserved attention while commercial artists are becoming wealthy day by day. In this regard, it is questioned that why such happens that commercialisation of talent is out-looking genuine talent. I agree up-to a large extent that 'anyone can do it' attitude is affecting the people with genetically gifted talent.

It is undeniable that continuous improvement in technology has opened doors of social media for a large amount of population due to which competition is ultimately increasing in the fields such as music, literature, acting, art and so on. This arises the problem of luck as social media algorithm is unpredictable and could unintentionally launch such artists with lesser or no talent in the aforementioned fields while the people who actually deserve the attention are left behind. In addition, 'anyone can do it' attitude has introduced problems like nepotism which badly affect the talent recognition of genetically gifted people who deserve it.

However, people like so can help themselves by promoting and advertising their talent and abilities in the fields they are expert in, which will not only boost their recognition but also will help them to experience the wealth and fame about which they have been desperate all along. Also, as their is large population and competition is continuously increasing, regular practice and hard-work along with consistent showcases of the talent are one of the only means to achieve success in today's world.

In my opinion, as there is nothing promised in this world, people with exceptional talent would have to try endless ways so they can respectively reach the mainstream audience that would allow the artists to fulfill their dreams. Nonetheless, people must also derive their focus from commercial talent that have been affecting the natural talent of people and focus more on underrated and deserving artists across the globe.

To conclude, although arising problems due to 'anyone can do it' attitude is affecting natural talent of genetically gifted people yet they can practice the aforementioned solutions to gain benefits and ultimately achieve success along with wealth and fame.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt and maintained a clear position throughout the essay. You successfully identified the tension between commercial success and genuine talent. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat repetitive; for instance, the suggestion that artists should 'promote themselves' is mentioned in both the third and fourth paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, fully developed argument rather than restating similar points. Your examples are general; incorporating a specific reference to a real-world trend or industry phenomenon would strengthen your argument significantly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'In addition,' 'However,' and 'To conclude' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by slightly mechanical transitions. For example, the phrase 'people like so' in the third paragraph is unclear and disrupts the logical progression. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of social media algorithms and the mention of nepotism. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'commercialisation,' 'unpredictable,' and 'mainstream audience.' However, there are instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'it is questioned that why such happens' and 'out-looking genuine talent.' The phrase 'genetically gifted' is also used somewhat inaccurately in this context, as artistic talent is usually described as 'innate' or 'natural' rather than genetic. To improve, focus on using collocations more naturally and avoid over-relying on repetitive phrasing like 'wealth and fame.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'as their is large population' (should be 'there is a large population') and 'people like so can help themselves.' There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement, such as 'commercial talent that have been affecting.' While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article placement.

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