Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.
Do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In some countries there is an attitude that people with some God gifted and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated and people with no talent become more rich and famous. I am disagree with this statement below i will give you some general examples to prove my statement.
Firstly,with my ideas, knowledge and experience a man should have some genunine or talent because talent cant not be remove from person mind . they have full hand on his talent to make a good income but some time i not be possible to show your on talent due to some issues like financial issues and other . burt some people with no talent become more rich and famous they also work hard to achive ther goials in life. that time their naseeb are fully with him he can do every thing .
Secondaly, talented people are not more rich then the person has no talent because the person has no idea that he has this kind of talent he has no more chances to take over his talent and show to other people . some time a life give him chance to prove his talent and he also prove it. talented people are also not more rich and famous
At last , i conclude that talent is a big this sometime it take time to succecd and prove people with zero talent are more talented then the person have genuine talent due to hard work and good belives on her self
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to develop a clear or consistent argument. While you state your disagreement, the supporting ideas are fragmented and lack logical progression. The arguments regarding 'naseeb' (luck) and the distinction between talent and hard work are underdeveloped and often contradictory. The essay lacks specific, relevant examples to support the claims, relying instead on vague generalizations. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea that directly supports your position, and provide concrete examples (e.g., mentioning specific industries or types of artists) to illustrate your points more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the internal flow is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical or incorrect manner, such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondaly,' and 'At last,' which do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of thought is difficult to follow because the sentences often lack logical connection to one another. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to track the argument. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one to create a cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'God gifted' instead of 'God-given' or 'talented' and 'naseeb' (a non-English term). Some phrases are unclear, such as 'talent cant not be remove from person mind.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with precision. To improve, work on learning collocations and synonyms for common words, and focus on using more academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people... is not valued'), sentence structure (e.g., 'I am disagree'), and punctuation. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for basic errors is essential.
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