Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, in few states there is a behavior that every individual can do anything like art, music, dramas, literature. Consequentaly, people with no extraordinary traits get famous and those with actual talent are not getting appreciation. I totally agree with this statement, because they do not create role models and cause unrecongnization of real talent.

Firstly, when people with no actual talent start doing things like art , music they do not do work hard. They use other people's ideas and art to get their own advantages. Moreover, they just work to get benefits and perform no actual role in promoting art or music. For Instance, in modern trends, every infuencer on tiktok or instagram are creating reels with no skills and proper means just to get their economical gains.

Secondally, bec of art, music and literature is performed by everyone, it is difficult to identify the real owner and main talent. Furthermore, every individual has not access to social and high platforms. Because of this, it become difficult for talented people to get their work recognizable on higher platforms. Due to this reasons, it become unfair for them to gain even their genuine need while people with less talent but more opportunities become more popular.

In conclusion, because of the new era concept of "everyone can do anything" the actual talent remain un-noticed and the others with less talent but good platforms gain more respect and economical growth, I totally agree with this. Moreover, in addition to encourage people to do everything we also need to create opportunities for real talent so they get their needfull respect and name they deserve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed the prompt and maintained a clear position throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, such as the mention of social media influencers and the difficulty of identifying genuine talent. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the point about 'other people's ideas' is mentioned but not fully explored with a concrete example. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation or a more specific, illustrative example to support your claims. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, though it introduces a new point about creating opportunities, which is slightly outside the scope of the original prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to link your points. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Secondally, bec of art, music and literature is performed by everyone'. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'influencer', 'economical gains', and 'un-noticed'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and spelling errors, such as 'consequentaly', 'unrecongnization', 'infuencer', and 'needfull'. Additionally, some phrases are slightly unnatural, such as 'in few states' instead of 'in some countries'. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and pay closer attention to collocations to ensure your language sounds more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('every influencer... are creating'), incorrect preposition usage ('in few states'), and awkward phrasing ('every individual has not access to'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like article usage and verb tense consistency. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher band score.

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