Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, in many nations anyone can participate in the arts- music, litersture,acting, art etc. As a result, individuas with no talent become rich and popular as compare to more talented persons is not get valued or appreciated. In my view, I strongly agree with the statement many individuals are particapted in acting field because of their parents belonged to that field mostly in bollywood.

To commence with, there are several opportunities for those youngsters whose parents are belonged from technichal field like acting, music, and art etc. When their guardian should retire they would adjust you in that place where now they are perform. For instance, Sharukh Khan, he is a top bollywood star now he's above 60 and he have adjusted their child Aryan as a front actor in the top block busted movies. Aryan did not have experience in acting due to his father, acting is now his profession. Morever, many talented individuals are in list of waiting.

Furthermore, nowadays, if you have a big reference to can adapt any talent require field because reference has large authority as compare to talent. For instance, I am a Civil Engineer, now I have been working as a Building Inspector in NESPAK for the last three years. For this post, minimum two year experience is required. Nevertheless, MD of NESPAK is my father's childhood friend. Therefore, I was selected for that post.

In Conclusion, Nowadays every individual include our actors can use their reference and with the support of their guardian they entered in any skill require field. I am one of those individuals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance agreeing with the statement, focusing heavily on nepotism in the arts and general career fields. The ideas are presented, such as the example of Shahrukh Khan helping his son Aryan, but they are somewhat limited and shift towards personal anecdote rather than fully exploring the broader implications of genuine talent versus unearned fame in the arts. Furthermore, the final paragraph unexpectedly brings in personal experience regarding an engineering job, which drifts away from the core topic of the arts. Because the ideas lack full development and drift off-topic towards the end, this places the response at Band 5.0 according to the descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, attempting a traditional structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is flawed. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, such as 'To commence with', 'Morever', and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is also confusing at times, such as 'when their guardian should retire they would adjust you in that place'. The overall organisation shows some attempts at staging, but the lack of clear logical progression and awkward transitions place it at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited range of vocabulary with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'litersture', 'individuas', 'particapted', 'technichal', 'block busted', and 'require' instead of 'required'. Expressions like 'big reference' and 'large authority' are unnatural and imprecise. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic points, the numerous errors in spelling and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.5, which rounds to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, such as in the sentence 'Furthermore, nowadays, if you have a big reference to can adapt any talent require field because reference has large authority as compare to talent.' There are frequent grammatical errors involving verb tenses, prepositions, and sentence fragments, such as 'now he have adjusted their child Aryan'. These errors are pervasive and often strain the reader's understanding, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors closely.

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