Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The art is very populer now a days. one portun of the community believes that because of certain things anyone can do arts like music, literature, acting, art and many more, as a result on the place of real talent the untalented people become famous. While other part of community disagree whith this. In my opinion, I am agree whith that because in curent senario because of social media and fake reality platform non deserving peple take fame.

To begines with, In 21th century the time of internet every one wants to become famous on social media for that they start somthing unique which is not in market and adept one skil in which they have no interest but this is famous now a days so they got that stream. after using of different video skill or editing they got views and become famous but in reality they juts know only the area which is in video clip. As a result of that the people who have jenuan enterest in it and who do heard work to improve their skil but they not able to make video so people don't know about their talent.

In addition, In reality shows which are fake and make winner who give the more money orthe program which is scripted. In this kind of shows the real art or real person's personaliyu is not coming out and the person who give more mony he win and become famous.

In conclusion, The real taland is not everywhere, on social media the people give contant are not alwas jenuan and true but becoum on top so real artist doesn't get chance to shine because of lake of resorsis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position agreeing with the statement, pointing to social media and scripted television as reasons why untalented people achieve fame. However, the development of ideas remains somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on social media focuses heavily on people trying to be unique without true interest, but the arguments lack specific, well-developed examples to fully support the thesis. While all parts of the task are addressed, the ideas are under-developed and tend to over-generalise, aligning the response with Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall progression is hampered by a lack of logical transitions and frequent mechanical errors in cohesion. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body paragraphs are disjointed and rely on repetitive transitional phrases such as "To begines with" and "In addition." Referencing and substitution are frequently unclear, making the flow difficult to follow at times. The inadequate and inaccurate use of cohesive devices places this response firmly at Band 4.5, displaying characteristics between Band 4 and Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with frequent spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., "populer", "portun", "whith", "curent senario", "peple", "begines", "jenuan", "enterest", "heard work", "skil", "porson's personaliyu", "mony", "taland", "contant", "becoum", "lake", "resorsis"). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as "scenario" and "personaliyu", the sheer volume of spelling and word-choice errors severely strains the reader and restricts the lexical range to a basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex ones. Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences frequently run-on or uncapitalised (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters like "one portun" and "To begines with"). Frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ("the people give contant are not alwas jenuan") and incorrect prepositions, cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in several places.

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