Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.
Do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In today's rapidly growing world, in many countries have an attitude that anyone make an art, literature, acting and some other activities that can do in your daily life. As its consequence people who have no talents become rich and famous as a result an intelligent person is not and appreciated. I totally agree with this statement that a fully true.
On the one hand, indiviuals use the social media to intract with other person and also have capable to show their skills without any hasitation. Sings a song make blogs and also share their daily routine and persons looks at their abilities with full intrest and focused. Moreover, humans aslo use the instagram, tiktok, youtube and also some other digital apps with they money and got rich and also favourite with the others peoples. Online community also enhanced in the next decade and persons are more advanced their online society members.
On the other hand, indiviuals who work hard like arts with their own performance are hide behind the online gadget. This one is the main and essential drawbacks of the society. As a results, most of them give up hope for their next task and they do not get more benefit rather then tiktokers. For example, In our society females work at home like art and music but nobody appreciate their levels and also bask them to boost up your skills. Thanksfulness is play crucial part in the growing age and leaning age groups.
In conclusion, according to my point of view government should take strick action against the social media platform and banned the bad use of technology. This one is best task peoples views all the other skills.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position of agreement regarding the statement about talent and fame. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing. For instance, the argument attempts to discuss how individuals use social media to showcase skills without hesitation, but the points remain superficial and lack detailed supporting examples. The reference to females working at home in art and music is somewhat unclear and under-developed. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the ideas lack the extension and depth required for higher bands, placing this performance firmly in the Band 5 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an attempt at organisation. However, the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor transitions and mechanical cohesive devices. Words like 'As its consequence', 'Moreover', and 'This one is the main' are used awkwardly. Referencing is often unclear, such as in the sentence 'With they money and got rich and also favourite with the others peoples', which obscures the logical link between ideas. Due to these repetitive and inadequate cohesive features, the response achieves a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and formation that occasionally hinder comprehension. Examples include phrases like 'anyone make an art', 'intelligent person is not and appreciated', and 'bask them to boost up your skills'. The writer attempts to use less common words such as 'generation' or 'community' contextually, but inaccuracies in collocation and spelling (e.g., 'indiviuals', 'intract', 'hasitation', 'strick') are noticeable throughout. This level of lexical control corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures successfully produced. The text contains frequent errors in basic sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and prepositions. Examples of faulty structures include 'in many countries have an attitude that anyone make an art' and 'peoples views all the other skills'. Complex sentences are frequently attempted but are almost always ungrammatical or obscure in meaning. Errors are present in almost every sentence and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
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