Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowdays, every individuals have their own identity and strength which they can switch into profession along with little attitude is necessary in every term of lives and other side person who deos not have any cababilty but still got importance and appreciated by soceity so as per me I'm not agreed that people who don't have any talent or strenght got appreciated by society and other side people who have enough knowlegde but still doesn't get importance now i will elaborate in further passages.

Firstly, everyone thinks that they will do it any kind of work however still they don't think about they have capacity to do that particular work or archieve or not. Right attitude with confidence people can archive many success and good things in live along with individuals who have skills about arts , music and severals other thinks which can reach them towards sucess and build positive atttude about theit relevant skills. For example Tv actor have knowlegde that how to act particular character in various term of movies. Different type of genres have different type of characters to eleborate in movies so good actor have that skills how to switch one emotion to another in different kind of movies. but still doest get a enough appreciation from audiance and other side new comer actor who don't have knowlegde about acting and still get a fame after making such a non- informative movie or video but still get a fame and become rich so is biased with good actor and other side who don/t hace willing to archive but still get attitude that i can do it .

Secondly , people who have skill but not have good attitude and want thingd as per him/her so is also not a appropriate thing bad attiude leads to short term sucess only along with audiance who supports sometimes person who have enough skills in their domain and have attitude about their work is still right but if there were thinks that i can do it anything because i have mastered skilled in my filed that attitude leads towards bad energy and not a appropriate things

To conclude , person with right atttiude and skills should get a good sucess and appreciated by audiance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The candidate attempts to address the prompt by expressing a clear position of disagreement ("as per me I'm not agreed that people who don't have any talent or strenght got appreciated"). However, the development of ideas is severely hindered by significant expression issues. While the response touches on the central theme of whether untalented people become rich and famous while genuine talent is ignored, the arguments are repetitive and lack clear supporting examples. The mention of TV actors is underdeveloped and confusingly executed, making it difficult to fully grasp the intended point. Furthermore, the reasoning regarding attitude is muddled. As a result, the response falls into the Band 5 descriptor, where the task is addressed only partially, the position is sometimes unclear, and ideas remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall structural progression is weak. The introduction is a single, extremely long, run-on sentence that merges the thesis statement with background ideas. Cohesive devices are either misused or overused, particularly transitional phrases like "on other side", which appears multiple times awkwardly, and "now i will elaborate in further passages." Paragraphing is attempted, with distinct 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' markers, but the internal cohesion within these paragraphs is highly faulty. Referencing is frequently unclear, leading to a confusing flow of ideas. This aligns with Band 5, which features some organisation but no clear overall progression, alongside inadequate or inaccurate cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include "Nowdays", "cababilty", "soceity", "knowlegde", "archieve", "severals", and "audiance". The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the arts and professions (such as "profession", "genres", "character"), but these attempts are undermined by widespread inaccuracies and incorrect collocations, such as "switch into profession" or "make such a non-informative movie". The lexical range is minimally adequate for conveying a basic message, but frequent errors strain the reader and obscure precise meaning, fitting the Band 4 descriptor well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by massive run-on sentences containing multiple clauses strung together with coordinating conjunctions or lacking proper punctuation altogether (notably, the entire introduction is a single sentence). There is a very limited range of accurate structures, and complex sentences are almost uniformly faulty, featuring missing verbs, incorrect tense shifts, and severe subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., "every individuals have", "person who deos not have", "people who don't have... is also not a appropriate thing"). Punctuation is largely absent or misused. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly in Band 4.

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