Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In few nations there is mentality of pursuing the goals without having proper skills and talent especially in the music, literature, acting and arts and many more. This has lead non talented people to become wealthy and famous whereas the real talents are not admired or promoted. I completly agree with this statement as people have become biased and generally supports the person not their skills or talent.

There various factors behind this trend,the first and foremost is the popularity as people who are famous are considered to be more mature and deserving candidate even if they are not due to which causes imbalance in society as the real ones are supresssed due to low engagement of public support. In addition to that nowadays modern technologies are helping people to establish a successful carrer in their desired field as it provide quality content and corrects mistakes with ease and provides accurate result due to which it creates imbalance among the candidates who are talented. Moreover financially strong individuals are able to afford the required tools that help them in increasing productivity and efficiency due to which they prove to be more better in all aspects than the poor person.

However, talented people are welcomed by large number of people especially artist who are better in recognizing skills and ability to fulfil the desired task. Moreover many groups are coming forward to uplift the desrving candidates as it will help them in growing their carrer along with getting in the right direction. Beside it most the people are more interested in supporting the person who can fulfil their needs and demands rather than just being famous.

In concluion altough, the deserving people are not given equal opportunities compared to the non talented ones. However by identifying and social problem this problem can be overcomed easily as society nowadays is shfiting towards more authentic and deserving artist who can support in building a strong foundation in serving people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear overall position in the introduction: “I completely agree,” and you return to the issue of unequal recognition in the conclusion. The response also offers relevant points about popularity, technology, financial resources and support for deserving artists. However, the argument only partially answers the question because several claims are unclear or insufficiently explained. For example, the link between modern technology correcting mistakes and talented people being disadvantaged is asserted rather than demonstrated, and the paragraph beginning “However” introduces a counterpoint without clearly showing how it affects your agreement. Develop fewer ideas with specific examples, and explain more directly how people without artistic ability gain fame while genuine talent is overlooked. This would make your position and support more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting reasons, a paragraph offering a contrasting view, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “In addition to that,” “Moreover” and “However” help signal relationships between points. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long chains, and the connections between them are not always clear. The technology and financial-resource points, for instance, are placed together without explaining how each specifically supports the main argument. Some transitions also feel mechanical or confusing, particularly the shift to “However” and the final sentence. Use clearer topic sentences, separate distinct reasons, and make each paragraph’s relationship to your position explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “popularity,” “engagement,” “productivity,” “efficiency” and “authentic,” and the reader can generally understand your subject. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “people,” “talented” and “support,” while several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear. Phrases such as “real talents,” “more better,” “corrects mistakes with ease” and “serving people” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “completly,” “supresssed,” “carrer” and “concluion.” Build precision by choosing vocabulary specific to artistic recognition and public attention, and check spelling and common word partnerships during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “as,” “even if” and “whereas.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “There various factors” (missing verb), “people … generally supports” (subject–verb agreement), and “as it provide” (agreement and unclear reference). The sentence beginning “the first and foremost is the popularity” becomes difficult to control as several clauses are joined together. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “In few nations” and the comma splice after “trend.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurately controlled subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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