Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There is a unsaid belief in some countries that "Anyone can do it" in the arts. These arts field includes music, literature, acting, painting and other form of arts. And as the result of the person with no such talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is valued and appreciated.

In this age of social media where attention is everything, it is so important that a whole new industry has emerged known as "Attention Industry". People showing outmost stupidity gets rich and famous on social media, because the their stupid act gets attention fast and also it requires not to satisfy any logical argument. Whereas if someone truly talented starts making informative videos in certain manner which gives it a true distinction from other informative videos, they truly explains a particular topic or belief. This kind of videos will take years before getting any traction on social media platforms.

Majority of people while watching a actor act on stage thinks that they can also easily can act on the stage because they have this belief that art is easy. But the moment they get on the stage they freezes or act so badly that they will be saying that they will never act again. Same goes for singer people generally says that they can sing until they trys it. We thinks that art is very easy but it that alot to imagination and effort to create art.

I completely disgaree with this belief that some countries in the world posseses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a clear position in the final sentence, and the discussion of social-media fame and people overestimating their ability to act or sing is relevant to the prompt. However, the position is not consistently developed: the opening says genuine talent “is valued and appreciated,” which contradicts the task’s claim that it is not, and your final disagreement is not explained. The examples are broad and hypothetical, with little evidence or specific support, so the response addresses the issue only partially and the main ideas remain under-developed. The response is 234 words, below the 250-word minimum; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop your reasons for disagreeing and explain how your examples support that position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a brief conclusion. The second paragraph focuses on social media, while the third turns to acting and singing, giving the reader some sense of topic progression. However, the overall argument does not build clearly towards the conclusion, which states disagreement without summarising or connecting to the examples. Some links are awkward or unclear, such as “Whereas if someone truly talented starts making informative videos,” and “Same goes for singer” does not smoothly connect the examples. Repeated use of “because” and “But” also makes cohesion feel limited. Use clearer topic sentences and transitions, and make each paragraph explicitly support your stated position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “genuine talent,” “traction,” “distinction,” and “imagination,” and phrases such as “Attention Industry” show an attempt to express a broader idea. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “outmost stupidity,” “singer people,” and “it that alot to imagination.” Repetition of “art,” “talent,” and “famous” also limits flexibility. Spelling errors such as “disgaree,” “posseses,” and “trys” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise language to describe the contrast between popularity and artistic skill, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, for example the sentence beginning “Whereas if someone truly talented starts making informative videos,” but control is inconsistent and errors frequently affect clarity. There are problems with articles and agreement in “There is a unsaid belief” and “People showing outmost stupidity gets rich,” as well as verb forms in “they freezes” and “they trys it.” The opening also contains a confusing clause: “genuine talent is valued and appreciated,” which reverses the intended meaning. Some sentences are fragments or awkwardly joined, including “And as the result…” and “Same goes for singer…”. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and complete sentence structures before attempting longer constructions.

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