Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In few countries, there is argue that anyone can do arts music, literature, acting, etc. As a result people with no hardworking become successful and truly talent people value become zero. Although some people may disagree with this statement, I completely agree. Not only because they got more money and no value of talent, but also because of effects on the society.

There are multiple reasons associated with topic. Firstly, people without talent get more money. As they are investing on skill person and give some facilties. Take an example Alpha bridge company located in USA, they were hiring skilled developer to become a larger company in future. The CEO was unskill person, he was invest on developers to make more money. Hence, those who are invest on skill people earn more money.

Secondly, unskill person become more famous. As many famous Youtubers have no talent. For instances, Mr Beast is the famous Youtuber all around world without talent and highest Subscribers on the other side Dr Naveed is a Scientist in USA have global awards all around world but only few people remeber. Hence, unrofessional person have more value than other.

Lastly, genuine talent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I completely agree”—and give relevant points about money and fame, so the response does engage with the topic. However, the discussion is only partial and the ideas are not sufficiently explained. The Alpha Bridge example focuses on a CEO investing in skilled developers, which does not clearly show how people without artistic talent become rich or how genuine artists are undervalued. The YouTuber/scientist comparison is closer to the question, but it needs explanation and reliable, relevant support. The final point, “Lastly, genuine talent,” is unfinished, leaving an important part of your argument undeveloped. The response is also 55 words below the required minimum, limiting the opportunity to develop your position and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, separate points introduced by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly,” and some concluding links such as “Hence.” This helps the reader identify the intended progression. However, the development is incomplete: the final paragraph stops after “Lastly, genuine talent,” and the relationship between the company example and the claim about artists is unclear. Some linking is mechanical, and “As a result” and “Hence” do not always make the reasoning explicit. Improve progression by giving each paragraph one clear claim, explaining how its example supports that claim, and completing the final point. Use pronouns and transitions only where their references and logical connections are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “talent,” “famous,” “skilled developer,” and “global awards,” which makes the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the argument unclear or unnatural. For example, “people with no hardworking” does not express the intended idea; “people without artistic ability” would be clearer. “Unskill person,” “unrofessional person,” and “truly talent people” also show difficulty forming accurate expressions. Spelling errors such as “facilties” and “remeber” further reduce precision. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing artistic ability, recognition, and commercial success, and check spelling and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including “Although some people may disagree with this statement, I completely agree” and “As many famous Youtubers have no talent.” This shows an effort to use more than one sentence pattern. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and agreement often make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The CEO was unskill person, he was invest on developers” joins two clauses incorrectly and uses an inaccurate verb form; “those who are invest” has a similar verb-form problem. The fragment “As they are investing on skill person and give some facilties” is also incomplete. Practise complete clauses and consistent verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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