Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The in modren world, some countries today governments provides motivation hide that "anyone can do it" in many sector like art, music, literature, art and etc. and become rich, famous and genuine talent. I strongly with it point.

As every thing is creation of Allaha, evey person has own skill, so it is ture that every can do it. As many people are not good in studies but they can perform will in other field like art, music and etc. Many people are worried to start so the attitude like "anyone can do it " become necessary to be provided.

As their are many example, many people in arts, music and action does not have to much talents and eduaction but with time and lot of hardwork they make their in their fileld. Now a day their net worth is more than talented people. Not onlly the worth they are recnogized around the world due to their art. As we see our leader are not to much eduacted but they have art, how to run the system ,yet they are famous and rich.

In conclusion, i world say that "anyone can do it" if he had motivation and courage to do some thing.As none us learn before the birth, we have learn from sournding.It will be worthless to say that on talented people can perfoem well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a position in the introduction (“I strongly with it point”) and return to the idea that motivation can help people succeed. However, the response only minimally addresses the question because it does not clearly explain whether you agree that people without talent become famous while genuine talent is undervalued. The examples about people who are not good at studies and leaders who are not highly educated do not establish whether they lack artistic talent or whether talented artists are overlooked. The conclusion also shifts to saying anyone can succeed with courage, without resolving the claim in the prompt. The response is 24 words below the required minimum, which further limits the space available to develop and support your position. State your view precisely and explain it with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate general motivation from examples. This gives the reader some organisation. However, there is no clear progression from the question to a supported argument: the first body paragraph discusses individual skills, while the next moves to wealth, recognition and political leaders without showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “As their are many example” and “Not onlly the worth” are unclear or awkward, and the conclusion introduces a new learning-from-birth idea rather than drawing together the argument. Use topic sentences that directly answer the prompt, then connect each example to your position with clear explanation and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “motivation,” “talent,” “recognized,” “net worth” and “hard work,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to follow, as in “motivation hide,” “make their in their fileld,” and “our leader are not to much eduacted but they have art.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “art” is used to mean an ability to govern, and “worth” is unclear in context. Aim for accurate collocations and more precise terms, such as “gain recognition,” “build a career,” and “artistic ability.” Proofread spelling and choose vocabulary that expresses the specific relationship between fame, talent and public appreciation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “As many people are not good in studies” and a contrast introduced by “but.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “some countries today governments provides,” “every person has own skill,” and “many people … does not have,” which show problems with agreement, articles and possessives. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in “some thing.As none us learn before the birth, we have learn from sournding.” Work first on accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence construction, articles and verb forms. Then practise combining clauses with clear punctuation, checking each sentence for a subject and a correctly formed verb.

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