Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some countries nowadays, there is a behaviour that someone can take part in the arts - music, literature, acting, art. As a conclude, humans with no skills become wealthy and popular and real smartness is not considered and appreciated. This essay agrees that anyone can get admission in their particular subjects and may be good in their work. While others some becomes popular by just showing their money. I agrees that real talent who takes time to become proficent is not appreciated and not welcomed.

In the world many people who have magnificent skills in arts music, literature and any other profession earn only to meet their necessity. One thing that I believe none appreciate their work, there is no proper institute for the guidance of individuals. Additionally, in my country most people are unemployed because of there is no opportunity for youngster who could perform good in their profession. For example, the literacy rate in the world is around 70% who recently completed their graduation they don't have any chance of job.

Some people prefer to do business rather than to take part in any skill. The primary focus of these people is to earn money. they can become famous by developing good communication attitude. they don't have any talent to do work. Furthermore, they simply enjoy their life without any stress and anxiety. I disagree with the pattern of life, if sometimes they face disrespect on the fame and they lost their money then they would not face the challenge. However, the skilled person will cope with efficently as they already face the faliture in their life.For instance, a casual motive about the weath and respect, people could enjoy happy life without money and fame,just by doing work in their profession.

In comclusion, people can do anything that is intersted in their life and make himself ideal person for others but their skills and profession are not appreciated. Mostly people follow those individuals who is wealthy person and get fame. they like to make a connection.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position that genuine artistic ability is undervalued, and you attempt to discuss both skilled people and those who gain fame through money or communication. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it does not clearly explain whether you agree or disagree with the specific claim that people without talent become rich and famous while genuine talent is overlooked. The opening also introduces the unclear idea that anyone can “get admission in their particular subjects,” which does not establish a precise argument. Examples about unemployment and the literacy rate are not clearly connected to artists or public recognition, and several claims remain unsupported. State your position directly, then develop relevant examples showing how fame and rewards are distributed in the arts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “Additionally,” “Furthermore” and “For instance” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the relationship between points is often unclear. For example, the discussion moves from artists’ earnings to unemployment and literacy, then to business, communication skills and coping with failure without explaining how these points support the central argument. Some linking phrases do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas, and references such as “these people” are not always clear. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it in sequence, and use examples that directly support that reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “magnificent skills,” “guidance,” “unemployed,” “fame,” and “stress and anxiety.” This gives you some means of discussing ability, work and recognition. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “real smartness,” “a casual motive about the weath and respect,” and “make himself ideal person.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “proficent,” “faliture” and “comclusion.” These problems sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a more precise vocabulary for artistic talent and public success, and check spelling and common word partnerships before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use both short statements and some attempts at longer structures, including “if sometimes they face disrespect on the fame and they lost their money then they would not face the challenge.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I agrees,” “some becomes popular,” “they lost their money,” and “the skilled person will cope … as they already face.” There are also incomplete or awkwardly joined ideas, such as “One thing that I believe none appreciate their work.” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense consistency. Use complex clauses only when you can control their structure.

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