Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In few countries now a day there is an attitude that one people can do it in the arts song literature drama art etc.As a result individual no talent become millionaire famous and genuine talent is not valued appreciated. I am strongly agree with this statement.

To the begin its a common thing because every person look better than the other or not try better they can not talent in the field but try to better like anyone people listen music than he can make a singer and they can watch famous person he set the aim i will make a famous person its problem take every person with that i give you some examples like its my variety when i see a famous person than try to make a same position with same personality but some time i realize i am better than the other so i will came back on our aim.

subsequentily every person face the problem aim.destract how can solve this problem is set the aim and goal than seeing the better person take inspiration on the other but not change the goal or make the same copy of the person its not a good thing At this stage you can choice the some inspiration word about our goal when you distract our you can learn the line after that you can remember the goal and back to goal and work hard for the goal my inspiration line is I am better then the other i will achieve anything in the world you only lose when you give us remember this again and again oly lose when you give up if you don't give you can win incredible positions its line make me batter than others.

In conclusion its not a good thing because you better than the others you can't see the other only work to achieve our goal in my opinion i agree with this statement

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear view in the introduction (“I am strongly agree”) and repeat that you agree in the conclusion. However, the response only minimally addresses the specific claim about untalented people becoming rich and famous while genuine artists are undervalued. Most of the body discusses personal ambition, copying famous people, setting goals, and using inspiration; it does not explain how fame or wealth is gained without talent, or how talented artists are affected. The example about seeing a famous person is difficult to connect to the question and is not developed as evidence. To strengthen the response, build two relevant reasons for your position and support each with a clear example tied directly to the arts and public recognition.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the final paragraph returns to your stated agreement. Some progression is also signalled by phrases such as “To the begin” and “In conclusion.” However, the body paragraphs do not develop a clear sequence of arguments about the question, and the second paragraph shifts into advice about goals and motivational phrases. Connections between sentences are often unclear, while repeated use of “than,” “goal,” and “person” makes the writing feel repetitive. Several long stretches run together without effective punctuation, so it is hard to see where one idea ends and another begins. Organise each body paragraph around one relevant point, then use clear linking and sentence boundaries to show how its example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “arts,” “famous,” “talent,” “inspiration,” and “achieve,” and you try to express ideas about ambition and recognition. However, the range is often repetitive, and several word choices or phrases make the intended meaning difficult to follow, such as “my variety,” “same position with same personality,” and “incredible positions.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “subsequentily,” “destract,” and “batter.” These issues limit precision when discussing the central ideas of artistic ability, popularity, and appreciation. Work on accurate topic-specific collocations and check spelling; for example, use “gain fame” or “become popular” rather than repeating “make a famous person.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some basic sequencing and conditional ideas. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “I am strongly agree,” “every person look,” and “they can watch famous person he set the aim,” where verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence structure need correction. Tense and pronoun use also shift, as in “I will came back on our aim.” Punctuation is often missing, especially in the long body paragraphs, creating run-on sentences. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “when,” or “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms during revision.

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