Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes, I agree with this caption "anyone can do it".

It is common thing in many countries that the real talent is not valued and appreciate. But the power of money borrow the everything. Many peoples use their money to bought the telant. I think it was a wrong thing because the person who had a talent of music, literature, acting, art, etc can appreciate their talent and give the chance to export him self as a talented person.

It is true that 'everyone can do it' and 'anyone can do it' because every person have a hidden talent in his life. Because ALLAH got the every person have a talent.Some peoples are represent him self as doctor, engineer, player, etc.

I have the experience of this thing because in my country is a common thing to bought a talent through money. In Pakistan is a common thing because many peoples have hidden talent of arts-music, literature etc. Many of powerfu persons can not see the poor person as a successful person in the market. In Pakistan the almost talented persons belong to the poor families.

In Pakistan majority of talented persons can not give the chance to present their talent as a National and International level. Because the minority of the rich peoples cannot take the chance. Many ediucated and talented persons cannot have their own jobs and bussiness due to the lake of oppertunities. In a real life example in my village a boy has a talent of music but he cannot present him self as a national level because due to the lake of facility and money.

I think in every country have made a role to give the chance of the talented persons to present their self infront of the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position in the opening—“Yes, I agree”—and maintain a relevant focus on unequal opportunities for artists, especially in Pakistan. The example of a village musician who lacks money and facilities helps make your point concrete. However, the response only partly addresses the prompt: it does not clearly explain how people with little artistic ability become rich or famous, or how this directly leads to genuine talent being undervalued. The claim that everyone has a hidden talent also complicates your agreement without being reconciled with the question. Develop a few central reasons, explain the link between money, fame, and recognition, and support them with more specific examples or evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it states a view, gives general comments, and then focuses on Pakistan and a local example. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, progression between ideas is uneven. For instance, the paragraph beginning “It is true that ‘everyone can do it’” shifts to hidden talents and occupations without clearly connecting this point to the argument about fame and artistic recognition. Several sentences begin with “Because,” and repeated references to Pakistan and talented people make the development feel circular. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example to the claim it supports. More precise linking and referencing would help the reader follow how each paragraph advances your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “talent,” “opportunities,” “successful,” and “National and International level,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to interpret, such as “the power of money borrow the everything,” “bought the talent,” and “present their talent.” Spelling errors such as “ediucated,” “bussiness,” “lake,” and “oppertunities” also reduce clarity. Aim to learn topic-specific phrases as complete units—for example, how to describe access to opportunities, recognition, and financial influence—and check spelling carefully. Avoid repeating “talent” by using accurate alternatives such as “artistic ability” or “creative work.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify your main point. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns, agreement, articles, and verb forms. Examples include “It is common thing,” “every person have,” “Many peoples use their money to bought,” and “In every country have made a role.” Some sentences are incomplete or difficult to follow, particularly those beginning with “Because.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.” Check singular and plural subjects, verb forms after “to,” and sentence boundaries so that longer ideas remain clear.

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