Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many countries argued that individuals who are not familiar with music, literature, acting, art, etc are easily become famous but who has not a strong grasp on those are easily become famous. I partly disagreed with this statement. This essay will highlight the main facts in detailed.

To begin with, numerous countries have a problem with their community that their people are over confident because they believe that every thing is possible for every one but there is no evidence of this kind of statement. For example, an artist know that how make things perfectly such sculptures that is impossible for those who had no experience of it before, and then they become over confident and face criticism. Furthermore, music is a bit of hard thing to play that is obviously easy for those who has a strong grasp on it such as guitar and piano. These instrument to play needs such a quite strong practicing and fonding of it.

Moreover, literature is a language very harsh for those who are not indulge in it because they not have studied and try to speak or teach to someone like these subject are not easy. For instance, a teacher can easily give lecture of it to students because he has a experience of it and know how to convey the lecture of it, while others who are non-familiar with it and try to over smart on literature caan be criticised. In additon, like acting is a little easy in my perspective but not for them who never did in past and try to do it in front of audience are becoming the of fun.

To recapitulate, although people become get famouse who has a strong grasp on these fields. In contrast, individuals are not familiar with any field and try to do with over confidence then always face criticism and, I particularly disagreed with this statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I partly disagreed”—and refer to several arts, including sculpture, music, literature and acting. However, the response does not clearly address the central claim about people without talent becoming rich and famous while genuine talent is undervalued. Most examples instead argue that unfamiliar people may be criticised when they attempt an art form, which is a different point. The conclusion also says that people who have a strong grasp become famous, but this does not resolve your position on the prompt. To strengthen the response, explain whether fame and wealth can come without talent, why this happens, and whether talented artists are consequently overlooked; develop each claim with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “Moreover,” and a concluding paragraph. These markers help readers follow the broad sequence, and examples are generally placed alongside the relevant arts. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from public confidence to sculpture and then music without explaining how these points support the task’s claim about fame and recognition. Some linking phrases, such as “In contrast,” do not clearly express the relationship between the ideas that follow. The conclusion also introduces a confusing contrast. Make each paragraph develop one central argument, use pronouns and transitions to show precise relationships, and ensure the conclusion restates the same position established in the introduction.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary connected with the topic, including “sculptures,” “criticism,” “audience,” “literature,” and “strong grasp,” and you attempt phrases such as “convey the lecture.” This gives the response some relevant range. However, the vocabulary is limited and several choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow, for example “fonding of it,” “becoming the of fun,” and “over smart on literature.” Repetition of “strong grasp,” “familiar,” and “easy” also limits precision. Aim to choose words that express the task’s key ideas—talent, recognition, popularity and artistic skill—and check that phrases sound natural in context. More accurate collocations would make your examples clearer and help distinguish genuine ability from confidence or experience.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “while,” and “although.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction frequently interrupt the message. Examples include “individuals … are easily become famous,” “an artist know,” “those who has,” and “he has a experience.” Some sentences also lack a clear grammatical structure, such as “These instrument to play needs such a quite strong practicing.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check singular and plural agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and article use; clearer sentence boundaries will also make your reasoning easier to understand.

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